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Re: Crimson Caravan
DIR By: Victoreno
Date: May 31, 2013, 4:38 am
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Pending.
In the roleplay example, as in every roleplay situation on the
server, you only describe the physical aspects of a /me or /it,
not plans or thoughts. You also forgot line 4 but you still have
30 lines anyway.
Also, in the backstory it says she applied at the age of 18 and
was sent to Fairview "where she starts now" but the IC Section
says she is 27. If this is an IC lie, it's okay, just making
sure you got that right.
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Re: Crimson Caravan
DIR By: Renikara
Date: May 31, 2013, 6:29 am
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The roleplay example is honestly not my best I admit, as I don't
do perfectly well when its one sided. Yet I do understand what
you mean. And the age discrepancy is a IC lie on her age.
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Re: Crimson Caravan
DIR By: Victoreno
Date: May 31, 2013, 7:53 am
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You should edit your roleplay example within 48 hours of my
first reply to be judged then.
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Re: Crimson Caravan
DIR By: Renikara
Date: May 31, 2013, 8:46 am
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I edited my post with a modified RP post.
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Re: Crimson Caravan
DIR By: Victoreno
Date: May 31, 2013, 11:28 am
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Trial.
There are still alot of those descriptions in the roleplay
example but the application is generally okay now, we'll see
what you make out of it.
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Re: Crimson Caravan
DIR By: Reynald
Date: February 8, 2018, 1:11 am
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