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freepaw ;; windclan ;; finished
By: evie Date: October 2, 2012, 7:35 pm
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[center][sub]Name:
Freepaw
Age:
Five moons
Gender:
Female
Alliance:
WindClan
Rank:
Apprentice
Appearance (6 or more sentences):
Freepaw is an disproportionate dark blue female. Her fur is
often matted and unkempt
and splattered with dirt and grimy mud. Her legs are sleek and
slender, complete with
strong muscles that outline her small frame. A large white
stripe runs from her underbelly
up to her chest and ends at a sharp point above her eyes.
Freepaw's ears stick up above
her head unusually high, and her paws are like bricks that
constantly make her fall this
way and that. Her tail is short and stubby after an incident
with a fox she'd rather not
talk about, yet sometimes it's evident what happened.
Her eyes are something of storybook quality. A deep amber,
almost copper color adorns
her round pools, with her jet black pupil in the center. They
stick out like a sore thumb
against her scruffy pelt, and is often looked at with confused
glances on how she
could have such beautiful eyes and a horrid body.
Personality (6 or more sentences):
Freepaw is a complex being, to say the least. She is often
smiling and happy,
prancing around camp like there is no tomorrow. She's easy to
get along with,
and has no biased opinion about any cat, male or female, old or
young, gay
or straight. She loves every cat. this doesn't mean she has her
day, although.
a great sense of humor comes with a price, I'm afraid. Freepaw
has a hideous
temper, and you don't want to be in that hurricane when it
rolls around. Most
of the time this part of her does not show, however, and she is
very like-able.
This female also has some secrets that she keeps locked away,
like her family
heritage and kithood before she was a clan cat, but that never
comes up in a
subject if she can help it.
---Likes (at least 3):
Other cats * Running * Creativity * Snow
--- Dislikes (at least 3):
Water [includes rain] * Mean cats * Foxes * Butterflies
---Strengths (No MORE than 5):
Being friendly * Humor * Stealth
---Weaknesses (At least 3):
Swimming * Climbing * Temperment
History (at least 6 sentences):
Freepaw was born in a rogue group to two cats who just wanted
heirs to a throne.
The heir was required to be male, and she was born into a
litter of all females. Her
mother and father looked upon her with scorn and abandoned her
on the border,
along with her siblings, of multiple clans. Then they were only
a few moons, barely
weaned from their mother, when a fox brutally attacked her and
her sisters. All but
her and another were killed, leaving just two out to die with
major wounds. They
were picked up by a passing WindClan patrol and nursed back to
health, but Freepaw's
sister had died from infection. The clan named her Freekit
because of the inspirational
name. Free of death, really. She grew up with an adoptive
mother and father, siblings
as well. She has grown away from that family but hasn't
forgotten when her mother
had abandoned her and left them for dead.
Roleplay Sample (Required for first advanced bio):
[quote author=chickadee.
link=topic=743800.msg28421366#msg28421366 date=1349117009]
roleplay sample;;
[spoiler][sub][color=black]a creamy pelt swam through the dry,
arid desert, desperate to find something of use. she was
starving, and hadn't had anything to eat in a few days. this
desert landscape really sucked the life out of you.
brooklynne had been kicked out of bloodclan. for what, she had
no clue. a set-up, maybe? without any family or friends, she was
on her own, and determined to make a living as a loner, even a
rogue if that's what it came to. suddenly she stopped, sensing a
rustle in the nearby tumbleweed. they were one of the only
things close to plants you could find out here, except for rare
outcroppings of green tallgrass.
gotcha. the seal point though to herself, creeping up slowly on
her prey. anything could be under the prickly bush. a snake, a
rare vole, or even a small hare. whatever it was, brooklynne
wanted it more than anything. she steadied her tail from waving
and slid her brown paws across the cracked sand eagerly. at the
last moment, when she was sure she had it, brooklynne reached
out with speed, hooking her claws on something small and warm.
finally. she had something to eat.
when she pulled it out of it's hiding place, the point let out a
surprised gasp and dropped the figure with fierce disgust. what
was under the tumbleweed but a tiny, helpless, mewling, moon
colored kitten.[/spoiler][/quote]
Comments (optional):
The above sample is from my account on warrior cats rpg ~ I hope
that's acceptable.
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Re: freepaw ;; windclan ;; finished
By: evie Date: October 2, 2012, 7:53 pm
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[sub][color=teal]bump~! done.
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Re: freepaw ;; windclan ;; finished
By: wonderland Date: October 2, 2012, 9:17 pm
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It all looks great, but there are multiple capitalization
errors.
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Re: freepaw ;; windclan ;; finished
By: evie Date: October 2, 2012, 9:19 pm
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[sub][color=teal]well lower-case was used for styling, is that
what you mean? i can certainly change it, however.
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Re: freepaw ;; windclan ;; finished
By: wonderland Date: October 2, 2012, 9:25 pm
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[font=georgia]If it is for styling reasons, then I guess the app
is fine though i'm completely not sure. I'm going to let higher
staff go ahead and grade this--
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Re: freepaw ;; windclan ;; finished
By: evie Date: October 2, 2012, 9:27 pm
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[sub][color=pink]okay, fine with me. :)
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Re: freepaw ;; windclan ;; finished
By: Memmy Date: October 4, 2012, 9:13 pm
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I'd say that for your first advanced bio (on this site) you
would be required to use capitals. ^^
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Re: freepaw ;; windclan ;; finished
By: evie Date: October 4, 2012, 9:21 pm
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[sub][color=teal]Okay, I think I changed them all to capital <3
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Re: freepaw ;; windclan ;; finished
By: Memmy Date: October 4, 2012, 9:30 pm
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There's one left. x]
Fix that, and you're accepted. Beautiful bio! :)
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Re: freepaw ;; windclan ;; finished
By: evie Date: October 4, 2012, 9:38 pm
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[sub][color=teal]fixed x3 i think
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