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First post of lyric!
DIR By: Shelleyanne
Date: March 25, 2026, 11:50 pm
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Please be honest :)
But I do
It’s every day
And it’s all the time
Wishing that he was mine
He’s in my heart
And he’s in my mind
Sends shivers down my spine
He’s not the kind to stick around
He’s not the type to see things through
Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
But I do
He’s like a knock
On an open door
Don’t know what I’m waiting for
A little sweet that
I can’t ignore
I only want a little more
He breaks a heart with every smile
Breaks every rule I ever knew
Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
But I do
Do I want to feel the flame?
(yeah I do)
And know I’ll never be the same?
(Yeah I do)
He’s playing games and he’ll play me too…..
Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
But I do
He’s got this hard wild heart
And I’m not one for taking chances
So I run when he advances
But he knows the truth
Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
But I do
Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
But I do
Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
But I sure do
Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
Like I do
He’s got this hard wild heart
And I’m not one for taking chances
So I run when he advances
But he knows the truth
Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
But I do
It’s every day
And it’s all the time
Wishing that he was mine.
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Re: First post of lyric!
DIR By: billdraper
Date: March 26, 2026, 11:55 am
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--- Quote from: Shelleyanne link ---
>
> Please be honest :)
>
> But I do
>
> V1
> It’s every day
> And it’s all the time
> Wishing that he was mine
> He’s in my heart
> And he’s in my mind
> Sends shivers down my spine
>
> Chorus
> He’s not the kind to stick around
> He’s not the type to see things through
> Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
> But I do
>
> V2
> He’s like a knock
> On an open door
> Don’t know what I’m waiting for
> A little sweet that
> I can’t ignore
> I only want a little more
>
> Chorus(modified)
> He breaks a heart with every smile
> Breaks every rule I ever knew
> Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
> But I do
>
> Bridge 1
> Do I want to feel the flame?
> (yeah I do)
> And know I’ll never be the same?
> (Yeah I do)
> He’s playing games and he’ll play me too…..
> Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
> But I do
>
>
> Bridge 2
> He’s got this hard wild heart
> And I’m not one for taking chances
> So I run when he advances
> But he knows the truth
> Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
> But I do
>
> Bridge 3
> Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
> But I do
> Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
> But I sure do
> Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
> Like I do
>
> Bridge 2
> He’s got this hard wild heart
> And I’m not one for taking chances
> So I run when he advances
> But he knows the truth
> Can’t have him, shouldn’t want him
> But I do
>
> Tag
> It’s every day
> And it’s all the time
> Wishing that he was mine.
>
--- End Quote ---
#Post#: 67--------------------------------------------------
Re: First post of lyric!
DIR By: Marsha
Date: March 26, 2026, 12:00 pm
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I've never heard of 3 bridges in a song before, so that's a
first.
I like some of your clever lyrics, sounds a little Taylor Swift,
not a bad thing.
Do you have a melody in mind?
#Post#: 72--------------------------------------------------
Re: First post of lyric!
DIR By: billdraper
Date: March 26, 2026, 12:10 pm
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In the introduction section of this forum, you had mentioned,
you don’t do music. Just thinking of that, I arranged your lyric
into various sections verse, chorus, etc…..because it’s a
starting point in composing music, the way I see it, ie verses
are a mirror melody to one another. And. Music for chorus is
different. And. Music for bridge is different.
I like the lyric. Conversational and interesting topic.
The structure is different. The way I tried to organize it…so
many bridges!😊
See what others more knowledgeable think.
Bill
#Post#: 73--------------------------------------------------
Re: First post of lyric!
DIR By: Shelleyanne
Date: March 26, 2026, 12:14 pm
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I can hear it in my head, but not being a musician or singer,
can’t really communicate it. It’s a uptempo beat, kinda poppy
which is different from what I usually wry, which is more
folksy.
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Re: First post of lyric!
DIR By: redwriter1
Date: March 26, 2026, 12:19 pm
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Shelley, if you want Bill to run it through Suno for a melody,
I'm sure he would be happy to do so, but only with your
permission of course.
Heck, even I want to play with it, but it's all up to you!
#Post#: 81--------------------------------------------------
Re: First post of lyric!
DIR By: Shelleyanne
Date: March 26, 2026, 5:16 pm
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Suno wouldn’t be my first choice. I’m a boomer and
suspicious of technology lol. Would prefer to work with a
musician to create something.
#Post#: 82--------------------------------------------------
Re: First post of lyric!
DIR By: redwriter1
Date: March 26, 2026, 5:50 pm
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Totally fair Shelley, it's alot of fun for certain writers like
me and others. I've never let Suno build a melody or lyric for
me, but I get a great demo in 3 minutes that I can change 20
times if I want. And it's just fun. (smile).
If you don't have a subscription, I was just offering that lots
of people do and like to show you how your song could
potentially sound before you pay 100's of dollars to musicians
who won't play it the way you hear it.
Is that fair?
Frankly, sometimes when I load my guitar/vocal into Suno it adds
thing I would have never thought of , and sometimes makes me
re-think my lyric timing.
#Post#: 83--------------------------------------------------
Re: First post of lyric!
DIR By: Tex
Date: March 26, 2026, 6:16 pm
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Just my point of view, a Pro membership on Suno is $8 a month...
you as a lyric writer - I know you have in your head what it
should sound like with Suno you can put in your lyrics have it
do you a Pop song, Rock song, Country song or what ever you're
looking for, listen to it and be sure it sounds like what you
want. Some times you might hear it and think oh my god it might
sound better if I do this line different and it cost you
nothing. The last time I had a demo done it was $375 and if
something wasn't just right you're out that money. I call it a
good tool to writing. like I said JMO. And OH I still have a
flip phone for a cell phone, not interested in technology that
much either.
Good Luck
#Post#: 85--------------------------------------------------
Re: First post of lyric!
DIR By: Shelleyanne
Date: March 26, 2026, 7:36 pm
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This is a great perspective. Honestly, I could use it just to
generate some interest in the lyrics right? Doesn’t have to be
the final version of the song.
Thank you, I’m going to look into that. If someone wants to run
it through, that would be cool too.
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