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Dementia
By: Gangstarr4 Date: February 12, 2014, 4:22 am
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CHAPTER ONE: POWER
I woke up in the midst of a battle going on, one with my own
thoughts and a actual rebellion. I wasn't sure how I ended up on
the ground. All could I remember I was that leading my own army
into a building, a building of power.. greed.. and people who
lose themselves to a state of dementia. I don't what it is, its
like there were lines in the wall that glowed. Maybe.. Maybe I
was being overwhelmed by this sense of dementia. It was just a
urge in me to get this power. I had to get it. I had flashbacks
running through my mind of this secret island where me and two
others found a relic in a non-disclosed location. The dammed
relic kept flashing in my mind, was this a sign that I should
return to the island? I got up , stumbling and bleeding. It was
like I was outside of time for a moment, everybody was in the
middle of warfare and I somehow wasn't harmed. My hands showed
lines in them as I touched the walls to keep from falling. What
was this madness? I grabbed a dagger off the ground and suddenly
came back to my senses. A man charged at me with a gun but I
easily dodged him, my agileness was rusty but too rusty. I flung
the dagger at the back of the attackers head and then suddenly I
was back in that state of mind. I dropped to my knees. I felt
weak. My heart was beating faster and faster and faster, I
didn't know what do, all I could do was cry for some odd reason.
My eyes flashed white, the ominous flashbacks of the relic
returned this time clearer. Pieces were starting to form in my
mind. Something grabbed my shoulder, a bald man with the same
marks as me. He grinned and dragged me away, after that I went
unconscious and woke up on a boat...
To be continued.
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Re: Dementia
By: Wetbizket Date: February 12, 2014, 6:01 pm
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Short chapter, but my jaw was dropped the whole time lol! That
was one beast of an intro!
Gangstar not even missing a beat after his brief hiatus! 8)
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Re: Dementia
By: Aussie Boy Date: February 12, 2014, 7:46 pm
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It is my firm belief that you shoulc continue this. Great Intro
man.
Looking forward to this one boss.
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Re: Dementia
By: OGDaboss Date: March 7, 2014, 6:32 pm
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your descriptive writing has improved greatly young master.
a bald man with the same marks as me. - Agent 47 and his evil
clone? Nah.
You always have the most alluring introductions G4, please, oh
of course, you must continue on forth.
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Re: Dementia
By: Yossi Date: March 16, 2014, 11:51 am
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I really felt what the main character was feeling in the intro.
Good job! :D Keep up the good work man.
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