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Roomsound
By: Kate Doughty Date: July 8, 2018, 11:46 am
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Just a short screenplay :) A fun/creepy idea that's been
bouncing around in my head. Let me know what you think!
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Re: Roomsound
By: mimirobinson Date: July 11, 2018, 9:44 am
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Kate - this is so cool. This reminds me a bit of the piece you
wrote with the radio static? I love how you play with technical
effects that get at some internal human struggle. That
connection is v your style and you do it so well.
I love the balance you have with WHEN this is - it feels very
not-so-distant future or could be right now and I just don't
personally have the app yet. The hesitancy of the mom with
everything technological is a great anchor - something everyone
knows.
The only thing I can think would be interesting to add/change
would be to elevate the stakes of what the boys are tuning
out... I don't really know what that would be, but maybe instead
of Kayla just practicing, it could be a recital she's been
working for, and Tony wasn't listening at all? Maybe that's too
much. Idk, but the payoff of the end where Tony is ignored is so
good and alarming, I feel like there are other things that could
build up to it.
Love this!
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