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||Loknoek|| The first step
DIR By: Frostdragon
Date: May 18, 2012, 11:51 pm
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[glow=white,2,300]On a world where reptiles rule the planet,
In a territory inflicted by tyranny,
Three orphans seek freedom away from the barbaric lies of which
they had been told.
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"Get down here Loknoek before we tell the adults!" Came the
angry yawpings of his fellow tribe younglings. Loknoek looked
down at them coolly through the dark branches of the enormous
tree, whose leaves halfway covered the area where he was
perched, hiding him. "Why don't you make me?" The saurus taunted
loftily in the most harassing tone he could muster, as he
waggled his long tail mockingly through the air. Loknoek
already grasped the knowledge a long time ago that all of them
were all brawn and no bite. He knew that he would be perfectly
free to stay up here for as long as he liked. His baiting seemed
to work since the olive-colored Thornac, who had been his rival
ever since he could remember, was so maddened to the point of
stamping his feet with jaws agape like a sick crocodilus. Well,
Loknoek couldn't actually see him from where he was positioned,
but he knew that was what he was doing. "Condemn you, Loknoek!"
He roared up to him, throwing to the ground a wooden pole that
he had been carrying. "You're gonna get us all in trouble! We're
not supposed to be here you jerk!"
Loknoek simply changed position on the hefty branch that was
serving him as a platform and layed on his belly with his arms
lazily hanging down while his back legs resided in the air. "Got
a problem with it?" He replied sassily as a sea of complaints
flew up at him. So what if he made them angry. Loknoek
considered himself more of the solitary type anyway, and since
he had never gotten along with his peers from the beginning he
felt he had no reason to endear himself to them now. "Besides,"
he spoke louder, "You lot look like gaggle of cross-eyed fools
just standing there. Come up here yourself if ya want me to come
down!" Smirking, Loknoek closed his eyes and ignored them. The
only reason the other youths wanted him down was because they
would reproached by the adults if they left him out where they
weren't supposed to have been in the first place. Rustle.
Loknoek glanced down and wasn't surprised when he noticed
Thornac had started making his way into the lower branches of
the tree. That soft-heart was simple and took every chance he
got to get into a fight with him. Just let him come! He thought
and closed his eyes again.
Despite pretending not to pay attention to the olive-colored
saurus climbing after him, Loknoek listened very carefully for
his approach. He reluctantly admitted that Thornac was probably
a lot stronger than him, and he certainly didn't want to be
caught unawares by his rival. Thornac had a broad build, a
pointy, wedge-shaped snout, and interesting charcoal-colored
smudges down his skin, and while Loknoek was lanky, his coloring
easily outdid Thornac's with his crisp white body and vivid
purple stripes. Not to mention, he had a lovely crest of
feathers and a smear of black on his chin. Yes, he was certainly
one fine-looking saurus, and cordially brought this up.
Loknoek's blue eyes snapped open as soon as he heard the leaves
rustling only a few branches away and the scraping of Thornac's
quick ascension. No way! He was this far up the tree already? A
little alarmed by this, Loknoek rose to his feet earlier than he
intended. "Good day, my awful fellow!" He said with a mock bow
and saw Thornac's glare.
Hastily he grabbed onto the next branch and rose higher into the
mass of thick limbs in order to get away from his pursuer.
Thornac determinedly climbed on, and he knew that he wouldn't
give up the chase until he caught him. Loknoek stopped climbing
and crouched on one of the higher, thinner branches which swayed
a bit under his weight. He recognized the danger and made sure
one hand grasped a different branch to balance himself. Thornac
was still beneath him, but continued at a rapid pace and would
overcome the distance in no time. "Hey, you're good at
climbing." He chimed. "I've never seen you climb before. Is it
talent, or did you train to do it?" He waited, but that
tailbiter was ignoring him! "I don't suppose you have anything
else to do with your spare time, right?" He continued. "After
all, you're just so perfect at everything aren't you?" Thornac
answered him this time, only a branch below him now. "Shut up!"
He growled. "I can't believe I have to do this! You better get
down because I'm about two seconds away from tearing you a new
one!" Loknoek reckoned he was rather serious about it this time.
He was not exactly in the best solution, but he was positive he
would be able worm his way out of this. He always did.
"Alright Alrigh-" His speech was cut off as a horn wailed
through the air, loud and deep, and then it sounded again after
what felt like an hour-long pause. It was enough to make Loknoek
freeze as a shiver coursed up his backbone, and he felt
unusually scared. The two young sauruses stopped their bickering
and looked at one another nervously as the entire forest went
quiet. Loknoek had heard this sound many times before, and each
time he did it had brought havoc to their tribe. It was the
signal for danger and each youngling had been taught to fear it.
"Lets go!" Thornac cried and descended recklessly onto the limbs
below. Loknoek barely understood him and wavered dumbfounded for
a moment, before he immediately followed the other saurus,
forgetting their strife from before. He felt the leafy twigs
snap under him as he made his way down. As he neared the bottom
he painfully slipped and fell onto another branch, so he decided
to jump the rest of the way and landed clumsily on the dirt. The
rest of the troop were still dutiful enough to hang around to
wait for him but he could tell they were also extremely agitated
and uneasy. "We need to get back to the tribe, come on!" Snapped
a dark copper female beside him and signaled everyone to follow
her lead. No one had to be told twice.
Catching a glimpse of Thornac making his way into the bunch,
Loknoek did the same as each of the trainees ran at the quickest
pace they each could manage and weaved their way through the
looming trees in a rush to get back to the village. The
territory was marshy, thick with clumps of tall grasses and
bushes. Loknoek, despite having almost mastered his way around
the terrain, was forced to venture into ankle-deep water which
contained the type of mud that liked to suction around his feet.
Despite this, he was one of the fastest out of the troop and
easily sped up to be at the front, but the village was still a
good ten minutes away. By the time Loknoek arrived he was the
first one to see it burning. It was actually on fire, right in
front of his eyes. Smoke drifted menacingly through the trees
while the flame cast an orange glow on its surroundings. Loknoek
stood as motionless as stone, too memorized by the dancing
flames hungrily swallowing all the huts and tents that it could
find and the screaming from the villagers fleeing and barking
orders through the chaotic event. "Mom!" He called out, suddenly
spotting her form. He ran to her as fast as the wind and grasped
her around the middle. "Mom what's happening?!"
"Loknoek, I'm glad you're safe!" She cried while Loknoek allowed
her to hold on to him and steer him away from the fire. "All the
children were gone, so we didn't know what to do when the
Pteronix dropped fire on us!" She had white hide, but unlike him
there were no stripes to be seen. Loknoek probably inherited her
graceful build, he noticed, as she lifted her elegant head
vigilantly like a sentinel, looking out for anything that might
hurt her young. After a moment she relaxed her tense muscles and
leaned down to him. "Listen, I want you to stay here and not get
close to the fire. I'm going back to fetch some things but I'll
be back...Got that?" Loknoek nodded to show he understood, and
in a flash his mother sped back between the burning homes that
had been standing for years. Alone now and standing anxiously in
the tall, dark grass, he shuffled his feet and waited for her to
return. He could see sauruses running around everywhere,
attempting to save their huts or gather up their families. When
was mom coming back? He thought, running a few scenarios through
his head about what could happen to her in the commotion. Then
again, it had only been a minute since she left him. Before
Loknoek could get too absorbed in his thoughts something
abruptly collided with him from behind and he was buffeted to
the ground.
"Watch it!" He snarled, getting to his feet after the impact.
Laying on the grass, another young trainee had fallen and was
also standing up. "Sorry!" She said briskly and sprinted off
without another word. Loknoek frowned and looked back to the
fire engulfing the village. It was strange, he thought, as he
watched his home being destroyed without feeling anything.
However, he did know that he couldn't just stand around like a
lost calf. Loknoek started to pace around the perimeter of the
village, back to where the giant trees started, and suddenly he
saw the group of full warriors huddled around. "Chief Tonakin
has collapsed!" One called, signaling a few others over. He
blinked in surprise and attempted to get a better look over the
tall adults. His tribe had a simple hierarchy with the leader,
Tonakin, an elderly brown-hided saurus in charge over the
children and adults to make sure everyone didn't go into
complete chaos. Loknoek wasn't too chummy with Tonakin, but he,
like everyone else, knew his old smile and his mild nature that
somehow seemed to make everyone more tolerant of each other.
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#Post#: 197--------------------------------------------------
Re: ||Loknoek|| The first step
DIR By: Frostdragon
Date: May 18, 2012, 11:53 pm
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[center]-Saving this spot because of the 20,000 character rule.-
Go look at how shmexy Loknoek is while you're waiting for me to
stop procrastinating and write the story.[/center]
#Post#: 198--------------------------------------------------
Re: ||Loknoek|| The first step
DIR By: Frostdragon
Date: May 18, 2012, 11:54 pm
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[center]-Saving this spot because of the 20,000 character rule.-
Last save.[/center]
#Post#: 202--------------------------------------------------
Re: ||Loknoek|| The first step
DIR By: Koroda
Date: May 19, 2012, 8:00 am
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How did you draw that picture? It is great! I also like the
title.
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Re: ||Loknoek|| The first step
DIR By: Frostdragon
Date: May 19, 2012, 4:30 pm
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[center]Thanks! I used Photoshop CS3 and used and edited a stock
image texture from google for the background.
Its tried to make it to be a picture of Loknoek as a child or
juvenile, but you can't really tell.[/center]
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Re: ||Loknoek|| The first step
DIR By: Koroda
Date: May 19, 2012, 4:49 pm
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Yeah... I must try your methods out.
#Post#: 328--------------------------------------------------
Re: ||Loknoek|| The first step
DIR By: Koroda
Date: May 20, 2012, 1:58 pm
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Yay! You began it! It is really great so far! It makes sense
and its very interesting. I can't wait to read more!
(P.S. Sorry I double-posted)
#Post#: 351--------------------------------------------------
Re: ||Loknoek|| The first
stephttp://reptilianforever.createaforum.com/literature/lo
DIR By: Frostdragon
Date: May 20, 2012, 9:10 pm
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[center]Thanks! :D Yeah, Ive been trying to write it even though
I'm supposed to do school projects that were due forever ago. Oh
well.
I'm hoping to make sequels after I'm done with this
one.[/center]
#Post#: 352--------------------------------------------------
Re: ||Loknoek|| The first step
DIR By: Koroda
Date: May 20, 2012, 9:11 pm
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I would love to see sequels! It is great so far!
#Post#: 380--------------------------------------------------
Re: ||Loknoek|| The first step
DIR By: Frostdragon
Date: May 21, 2012, 10:30 pm
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[center]Yeah, but it might be a while until this one's done. I
have about 6535 characters so far.[/center]
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