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Liquid love
DIR By: feejones86
Date: December 4, 2015, 7:32 am
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In inky, starless dark
Our bodies intertwined
You tell me I'm a draft
Of the enslaving kind.
Wild rivers running through
Erode my resolution
Stirring heated blood
Oh! Heady solution!
As you wring my sodden flesh
Collecting soma tears
My core turns fountain
A tameless need rears.
Ah! My cup runneth over
Hold steady not to spill
And raise me to your lips
My love, take your fill.
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Re: Liquid love
DIR By: misterpoet
Date: December 4, 2015, 7:41 am
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I'm glad we fixed your account. This poem is very sexy in a
darkish mysterious way! Much enjoyed!
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Re: Liquid love
DIR By: larsen_m._callirhoe
Date: December 4, 2015, 5:54 pm
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hi feejones this is very sensual and i love the imagery. much
enjoyed and welcome to ourpoetry poetry forum.......
victor
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Re: Liquid love
DIR By: larsen_m._callirhoe
Date: December 10, 2015, 3:38 pm
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hey feejones i was thinking imagine the darkest fading away from
the earth's star and we go into total darkening by bleeding the
liquid you speak of feejones out of light.... what a weird
feeling i just had.
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Re: Liquid love
DIR By: Silver Wind
Date: December 10, 2015, 4:06 pm
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There is some nice imagery, and I like some of the lines. I
loved the opening line and there is a clever use of rhyme.
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Re: Liquid love
DIR By: SkaaDee
Date: July 21, 2016, 9:43 am
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I like the first 2 lines but I'm not sure what "draft of the
enslaving kind" means.
Still the poem has an enjoyable feel.
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