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moonlit hour [Denied]
By: whtever Date: January 13, 2013, 4:45 am
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I couldn't sleep. A brilliant moonbeam was slanting through a
gap in the curtains. It was shining right on to my pillow. My
parents in our house had been asleep for hours. I closed my eyes
and lay quite still. I tried very hard to doze off. It was no
good. The moonbeam was like a silver blade slicing through the
room on to my face. The house was absolutely silent. No voices
came up from downstairs. There were no footsteps on the floor
above either. The window behind the curtain was wide open, but
nobody was walking on the pavement outside. No cars went by on
the street. Not the tiniest sound could be heard anywhere. I had
never known such a silence.
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Re: moonlit hour [application]
By: teamsatisfaction Date: January 13, 2013, 1:32 pm
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It's not bad, but I am not a recruiter.
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Re: moonlit hour [application]
By: bob123f Date: January 13, 2013, 1:34 pm
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[quote author=teamsatisfaction link=topic=307.msg3437#msg3437
date=1358105560]
It's not bad, but I am not a recruiter.
[/quote] Nor am I.
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Re: moonlit hour [application]
By: teamsatisfaction Date: January 14, 2013, 8:34 pm
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You could contact one of the recruiters (BM075, Michaelrd,
Supercool08) to look at the application, but idk if you're
supposed to ask recruiters to look at it.
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Re: moonlit hour [application]
By: supercool08 Date: January 15, 2013, 9:51 pm
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Denied. I agree with Teamsatisfaction on this one, it wasn't
bad. However, from what I read you failed to provide a solution
to your problem. You are improving and I do hope you will try
back in 2 weeks. You are very close to becoming a writer. =)
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