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[Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
By: HematoLogMeIn Date: July 24, 2016, 5:57 am
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So, I just wrote this out for another site, but I figure I'll
drop it here since I realize I haven't really given an example
of my writing. It's just a pervy oneshot, and I'll grant that
there's not much depth or anything, but I hope that I achieved
my goal in portraying high school lesbian romance in an
unconventional light. Please bear with me with it over potential
small errors, though, seeing as I started writing at like ten
past five in the morning and it's five til seven now, and I've
had no sleep.
Synopsis: The president of the anime club has a dirty little
secret: her libido. Who better to address this with than the
greenhorn vice president who clearly has a thing for her anyway?
[hr]
The anime club congregated around the meager table in the
student common area. A few small conversations hardly filled the
space with more than a quiet murmur. With a sigh, the club
president, a rather lanky goth girl, third year, kicked her feet
up onto the table.
"Y'know, we should plan a get together, maybe an anime screening
at my place," she called over the noise. Being only about a
dozen members, everyone quietened down quickly. Running a hand
through her black hair, the president continued. "I mean, it's
not like we do much else. The rest of the school thinks we're a
joke." A few others sighed and nodded in understanding.
Next to her, however, the eager first year VP perked up, blonde
ponytail swishing behind her. "I-I think it's a great idea! We
can use the club's entrance fees to help pay for the snacks and
stuff, right?" Her energy was almost cute, in an odd, diligent
way.
The poor girl was going to work herself to death one of these
days because of it, and with that same determined smile.
Pushing the thought from her mind, the president returned to the
topic at hand. "So, that the case, treasurer?" she called,
turning that classic green-eyed glare on the third year boy. He
flinched before offering a small nod. A smile curled at her
lips. "Good. It's probably best to do it next month, so we'll
discuss date and time at the next meeting. That'll be all for
today."
As the other kids started filing out of the large space,
returning to their own conversations, the goth caught the vice
president's arm.
"Hold up, Sophia," she said, lowering her voice some.
"Yeah, what's up, Violet?" the younger blinked.
Silence passed for a moment before the older let out a huff,
putting her hands on her hips. "Thanks for the coffee this
morning...and all this past week. You put a lot into keeping
this club up, and I have something for you," she hummed, turning
on a fairly platformed heel in the direction opposite of the
main school exit.
The blonde followed her without question, and once again a smile
tugged at her black-painted lips. God, this girl was so
predictable.
"So, what is it?" she inquired, scrunching her eyebrows
together.
"It's in my locker," the black haired girl grinned easily,
"But..."
With a few more steps, the president snatched for the younger's
wrist, forcing blue eyes to meet green.
"...Before we get to that, let it be known that I see through
what you're doing, what with your special treatment."
The vice president let out a nervous laugh. "W-what are you
talking about, Violet? You've kinda had it rough lately, so, I
just--"
The goth cut her off. "If I didn't know any better, I'd say you
had a crush on me."
All in one movement, the younger girl's eyes widened, her mouth
closed, and her face flushed three shades of pink. Bingo. Oh,
kids and their young love.
"You should know, I'm like a poison," she tugged at the wrist
clenched in her hand, pulling the shorter girl in closer, to
lean in towards her ear, "and I'm quite a heartbreaker."
Sophia averted her gaze, biting her lip gingerly. "So you say,
but...I think there's more to you than your apathy," she
whispered, flicking her eyes for contact before turning to the
side again, probably to save her burning face some trouble.
The rush of the Love Game started to kick in, and Violet just
couldn't help herself to the call. It spread through her veins
like wildfire, the instinct of the hunt, and her prey braving
out in the open like that; it was just so rich.
Craning her neck to loom towards the conch of the more
vulnerable girl's ear, she purred, "Would you like to test
that?"
A moment's hesitation, and a small gulping sound from the
blonde's throat, and then, Violet let out a heavy chuckle. "All
right, then."
She tore to the side, still holding the younger's wrist with an
iron grip, directing a beeline straight into the girl's bathroom
she had stopped in front of, and with a quick, simple jerk of
the arm, she had the blonde in front of her, backed against the
tile wall. Her black-painted lips cashed against those soft,
delicate buds, and her untamed hands quickly found their way
into that blonde hair.
Sophia let out only a faint whimper at the impact, but melted
clumsily into the unexpected kiss. Within mere moments, a faint
tremor in her inexperienced hands on her back betrayed her.
The president pulled away, admiring her handiwork with a cruel
smirk. "Are you all right, dear?" she teased, fingering through
that hair and taking with it the tie that bound it up, letting
the golden locks fall freely down the other girl's shoulders.
"You're trembling."
"Y-yeah, I've just...never felt it this strong before," the poor
thing managed breathily, chest rising and falling visibly.
Absolutely endearing.
Violet almost lunged right for her sweet again, but glanced over
her shoulder, grunting with a mild frustration. "We could be
seen from here," she commented thickly. She had hardly whet her
lust, too.
All it took was another grip, the shoulder this time, and a
harsh tug towards the other wall, and as far as the rest of the
afterschoolers were concerned, out of sight, out of mind.
Immediately, the goth sank her lips down into the inviting home
of the other's, freshly sticky with remnants of smeared
lipstick. Exhillirated, the lesser experienced fumbled through
the flow, tracing her hands up the taller's waist, still
trembling.
Chuckling, the older ripped those hands away, pinning them to
the supporting wall. Sophia started to slide down it, knees
growing too weak to keep her standing, so of course the goth
planted her own at the juncture of her crotch to keep her
upright enough. The poor doe was practically melting to her
touch, and it was that control that made this whole stupid game
worthwhile.
Sadly, all good things must come to an end.
Just as the blonde had pressed a needy moan against her mouth,
the tak-tak of other footsteps sounded from the door, followed
by two voices.
Embittered, the president slunk away from her fun, staring in
the face of the dazed blonde. The two girls who entered the
bathroom froze behind her as she turned on the heel of her boot,
likely at the sight of the smear of black lipstick that colored
the blonde's lips grey. "Come along," she barked, agitation
showing through. The intruders, likely student atheletes, parted
a way for them without a word, stunned.
Once out, Violet turned to her new toy, green eyes scanning over
her, suppressing her hunger back down to managable levels. Only
a quick turn down the science hall lead them to her locker,
which she opened without the vice president saying a word. She
probably couldn't speak, after that kind of encounter with
passion. Hell, she was still trembling a bit.
From her locker, the goth drew out a few pieces of paper: a
handdrawn work of art, one she normally would have commisioned
for about fifteen dollars, and the other, a document, outlining
some terms to a rather unconventional type of relationship.
"Here you are, Sophia," she smiled, easily buttering up her
edges to appear more softened.
As the blue eyes scanned over the page, her face lit up from
pink to livid. "Th-this is," she stammered.
"Only if you'd like, my dear," the older cooed knowingly. "My
lovers seem to come and go, but if you want something a little
bit more permanent, well...I tend to show my servants my true
colors."
Oh, Violet, you rotten, lecherous huntress, she thought proudly
to herself, with what you just put that poor girl through,
there's no way she can resist you. She's caught in your web, and
a diligent type like her? She'll run herself ragged once she's
addicted to you.
Those innocent eyes met with hers sternly, blush still clearly
visible. "If it's what it takes to show you that y-you're worth
more than this persona of yours, fine, I'll play your game."
The corners of her lips turned into her cheeks as she smiled so
broadly it almost hurt. She planted a little kiss on the
shorter's forehead, reaching her thumb up to wipe the smudged
remains of her throes of passion, turning her hand to present
the hair tie once more.
"Perfect," she simpered, feeling the vibrato in her chest as the
other took her hair tie with her blush rising again.
And so she found herself, once again, winning at her own
dastardly Love Game, and this time, she was playing for keeps.
#Post#: 911--------------------------------------------------
Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
By: Orchid Date: July 24, 2016, 9:48 pm
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I thought it was a cute funny story. I hope you make more.
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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
By: HematoLogMeIn Date: July 24, 2016, 10:11 pm
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. I may get around to making more
eventually, but I find that writing much over two thousand words
gets a little taxing. I've been working on something, but it's
probably nothing worth posting yet, and I may not wind up
posting it here simply because it's a fanfiction, although I do
find that fanfiction can be a great tool if you use it to focus
on the concepts behind the actual writing process.
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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
By: Orchid Date: July 25, 2016, 3:43 am
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[quote author=HematoLogMeIn link=topic=96.msg914#msg914
date=1469416279]
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I may get around to making more
eventually, but I find that writing much over two thousand words
gets a little taxing. I've been working on something, but it's
probably nothing worth posting yet, and I may not wind up
posting it here simply because it's a fanfiction, although I do
find that fanfiction can be a great tool if you use it to focus
on the concepts behind the actual writing process.
[/quote]
Oh well I getit. Sometimes I forget if I wrote over a thousand
words if I am really in the groove. If you ever want to share
it,that's fine.
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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
By: Lumaria Date: July 26, 2016, 1:13 am
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I haven't had the chance to read it yet. But once I do I'll let
you know my thoughts.
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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
By: Lumaria Date: July 28, 2016, 9:55 am
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I've written yuri before but not like a comedy.
It's a good idea but I didn't really understand the characters
too much. And I've read yuri comedies before.
Maybe it revolved around on elements joke too much for my
tastes.
#Post#: 924--------------------------------------------------
Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
By: HematoLogMeIn Date: July 28, 2016, 11:57 am
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Yeah, one of my friends pointed out that this feels more like a
chapter two, in that there probably should have been more
development in the characters first before jumping right in like
that. What may wind up happening, since overall my feedback on
the forum I originally posted this one was fairly positive, I
may use this as a buffer between projects and wind up re-writing
it and adding.
I'll also add that this was loosely, and I mean very loosely,
based on a real-life scenario that I know of, albeit exaggerated
and names/places changed, but the concept is kinda there. I also
added some differences in personality, and I kinda took some
inspiration, just a twinge, from the main character of Gantz for
Violet. Luckily, despite taking from a concept from life, I
still have practically infinite creative liberty with where to
take it from here.
[sub]I still don't see exactly why both of you associated this
with comedy, but I'll chalk that up to Violet's attitude.[/sub]
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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
By: Lumaria Date: July 28, 2016, 5:29 pm
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I don't see how this is not intended for comedy. I do see it as
an attempt of a gag. Maybe if they were a but more realistic or
something else going on maybe.
It is a one shot too.
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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
By: 変態 Date: July 28, 2016, 9:17 pm
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Kudos for not using Japanese names XD
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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
By: Orchid Date: July 28, 2016, 10:56 pm
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Ooooo I didn't know you weren't trying for comedy. I just
thought the combination was so hilarious that it looked like
that was what you were going for.
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