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       Re: Terra Stregada Discussion board
   DIR By: Lumaria
       Date: February 7, 2017, 4:05 am
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       SOME UPDATES:
       #1) I renamed Raven to Brigid (no, I didn't attempt to name her
       Bridget tell either). I felt her real name was far too
       distinguished from her in-game name that they didn't feel like
       it came from the same person. I kept Adam as I felt he needed a
       strong and simple name.
       #2) Allister and Morrigan were too much of the dynamic duo that
       they didn't feel like distinguished characters. So I moved the
       dialogue around. Allister is more reserved but calculative and
       Morrigan is more outspoken and quick action.
       #3) I added a few scenes and expanded others. I'm still working
       on refining some of these new scenes as it may hold remnants of
       old dialogue.
       #4)  Now as for the infamous sex scene. I don't think the
       problem is having at all but just the over analysis of it. I
       fully intended it to be just a piece of the bigger picture of
       Brigid/Adam's relationship...as a writer I want to convey
       everything I possibly can "naturally". I didn't make an
       extensive sex scene because if I did that I wouldve wanted you
       to look at every detail or id be writing smut for the sake of
       it.
       As a +18 rating I expected readers to instantly know these
       scenes would appear on occasion
       In this particular case it plays important role, as in my eyes
       it explains to some degree how two polarizing characters can
       live together and say they are in a relationship. And it's very
       real for two people who shouldn't be with eachother be together
       for trivial reasons such as that.
       The one and only intention I want the reader to grab is what
       kind of relationship Brigid has with Adam. In fact the original
       revision never had it in the first place but was left
       unconvinced why these characters were together at all.
       the sex scene is not meant to be a stand-alone. It's suppose to
       be taken alongside the dinner scene, the way they speak to
       eachother and what happens after the physical chemistry. The
       biggest piece of the problem is that Caprice/Brigid are
       available for the physical needs, not the emotional.
       So I compromised a little by adding more exposition on what
       happens after and also making the main story tie in aswell. I
       attempted to rework Adam's letter and Brigid's responce as well.
       But that was the intended goal. If you have good alternatives,
       I'd be happy to look into.
       Also...  I'm currently very busy working on some real projects
       with actual money involved as well and I try to prioritize this
       just to set an example of what could be done in an MMO.
       Borrowing themes mostly from SAO and showing how it could be
       handled. (Except characters. They're unredeemable in my eyes).
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