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       #Post#: 121222--------------------------------------------------
       Re: Claim Form from Moorside Legal
   DIR By: Zedbee
       Date: June 8, 2026, 5:37 pm
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       hi
       would this be a robust enough defence?
       I am the registered keeper of the vehicle. I was not the driver
       at the material time. The claimant's own video evidence does not
       identify me as either the driver or a passenger. I am under no
       legal obligation to name the driver and I decline to do so.
       The Notice to Keeper ("NTK") does not comply with the mandatory
       requirements of Schedule 4 of the Protection of Freedoms Act
       2012 ("PoFA"). In particular, it fails to specify the required
       "period of parking". A single timestamp, or evidence showing
       only a moment in time, is not capable of constituting a period
       of parking. Furthermore, the NTK omits other mandatory wording
       prescribed by PoFA regarding keeper liability. As a result, the
       claimant cannot rely upon Schedule 4 to transfer liability from
       the unknown driver to the registered keeper. Accordingly, I
       cannot be held liable for any alleged contractual breach by the
       driver.
       In addition, basic principles of contract and consumer law
       require that a consumer be given a reasonable opportunity to
       read and understand contractual terms before any contract can be
       formed. The claimant's case appears to rely upon an alleged
       instantaneous contract arising the moment a vehicle stops. Such
       a proposition is inherently contradictory: if a driver stopped
       in order to read the terms displayed on the signage, that very
       act of stopping would itself constitute the alleged breach. This
       creates an impossible situation whereby compliance with the
       terms is prevented by the claimant's own contractual framework.
       Such an arrangement is unfair, predatory, and incapable of
       creating a binding contract.
       #Post#: 121233--------------------------------------------------
       Re: Claim Form from Moorside Legal
   DIR By: DWMB2
       Date: June 9, 2026, 3:13 am
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       I would recommend using the large bank of previous cases in this
       forum and looking at some other defences. For starters, use
       numbered paragraphs - if you reach a hearing, it's much easier
       for all parties if you can refer people to specific paragraphs,
       rather than "If you look at the part of my defence where I said
       ____".
       Your defence needs to respond to each claim in the particulars
       of claim. The easiest way to do this (in my opinion) is to do
       this in the same order as the particulars. As an example of how
       you might do this with some of the claims "2. It is denied that
       the defendant was the driver. The defendant was not driving nor
       present in the vehicle at the time of the alleged parking event.
       3. It is admitted that the Defendant is the registered keeper of
       the vehicle, but liability is denied. It is denied that the
       Claimant is able to recover charges from the registered keeper
       using the provisions of Schedule 4 of the Protection of Freedoms
       Act 2012..."
       #Post#: 121295--------------------------------------------------
       Re: Claim Form from Moorside Legal
   DIR By: Zedbee
       Date: June 9, 2026, 2:56 pm
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       Hi thanks for the advice.  could I use this?  if so what should
       i put in the areas of bold as it wasnt traditional "parking " it
       was no stopping or does that not matter?
       1. The Defendant denies the claim in its entirety. The Defendant
       asserts that there is no liability to the Claimant and that no
       debt is owed. The claim is without merit and does not adequately
       disclose any comprehensible cause of action.
       2. There is a lack of precise detail in the Particulars of Claim
       (PoC) in respect of the factual and legal allegations made
       against the Defendant such that the PoC do not adequately comply
       with CPR 16.4.
       3. For the avoidance of doubt, even if the phrase “Vehicle not
       permitted & grace period exceeded” were taken to be a minimal
       compliance with CPR 16.4(1)(a), the PoC remain defective. The
       Defendant is unable to plead properly to the PoC because:
       (a) The claim is put on a contractual footing but no written
       terms are pleaded or exhibited, contrary to CPR PD 16.7.3(1);
       (b) The PoC do not state the exact wording of the clause (or
       clauses) of the terms and conditions of the contract (or
       contracts) which is/are relied on;
       (c) The pleaded bases are internally inconsistent (“vehicle not
       permitted” vs “grace period exceeded”): either parking was
       prohibited (no contractual offer) or it was permitted subject to
       terms; it cannot be both.;
       (d) No period of parking is pleaded, nor facts explaining how
       any breach is said to have occurred (a timestamp alone is
       insufficient);
       (e) The PoC do not state precisely how the sum claimed is
       calculated, including the basis for any statutory interest,
       damages, or other charges;
       (f) The PoC do not state what proportion of the claim is the
       parking charge and what proportion is damages;
       (g) The PoC do not provide clarity on whether the Defendant is
       sued as the driver or the keeper of the vehicle, as the claimant
       cannot plead alternative causes of action without specificity.
       4. The Defendant submits that courts have previously struck out
       similar claims of their own initiative for failure to adequately
       comply with CPR 16.4, particularly where the Particulars of
       Claim failed to specify the contractual terms relied upon or
       explain the alleged breach with sufficient clarity.
       5. In comparable cases involving modest sums, judges have found
       that requiring further case management steps would be
       disproportionate and contrary to the overriding objective.
       Accordingly, strike-out was deemed appropriate. The Defendant
       submits that the same reasoning applies in this case and invites
       the court to adopt a similar approach by striking out the claim
       due to the Claimant’s failure to adequately comply with CPR
       16.4, rather than permitting an amendment. The Defendant
       proposes that the following Order be made:
       Draft Order:
       Of the Court's own initiative and upon reading the particulars
       of claim and the defence.
       AND the court being of the view that the particulars of claim do
       not adequately comply with CPR 16.4(1)(a) because: (a) they do
       not set out the exact wording of the clause (or clauses) of the
       terms and conditions of the contract which is (or are) relied
       on; and (b) they do not adequately set out the reason (or
       reasons) why the claimant asserts that the defendant was in
       breach of contract.
       AND the claimant could have complied with CPR 16.4(1)(a) had it
       served separate detailed particulars of claim, as it could have
       done pursuant to CPR PD 7C.5.2(2), but chose not to do so.
       AND upon the claim being for a very modest sum such that the
       court considers it disproportionate and not in accordance with
       the overriding objective to allot to this case any further share
       of the court's resources by ordering further particulars of
       claim and a further defence, each followed by further referrals
       to the judge for case management.
       ORDER:
       1. The claim is struck out.
       2. Permission to either party to apply to set aside, vary or
       stay this order by application on notice, which must be filed at
       this Court not more than 5 days after service of this order,
       failing which no such application may be made.
       #Post#: 121297--------------------------------------------------
       Re: Claim Form from Moorside Legal
   DIR By: DWMB2
       Date: June 9, 2026, 3:23 pm
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       This isn't suitable. When I said to look at other defences, I
       meant in order to get a sense of how they are structured in
       paragraphs and numbered sections etc., not to copy and paste the
       defence to an entirely different claim.
       #Post#: 121302--------------------------------------------------
       Re: Claim Form from Moorside Legal
   DIR By: Zedbee
       Date: June 9, 2026, 4:09 pm
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       Thanks for setting me straight. i've nicked things from the
       other defence that look to be applicable - but just going by my
       common sense - so would appreciate any feedback if they are not
       appropriate.
       1.
       asserts that there is no liability to the Claimant and that no
       debt is owed. The claim is without merit and does not adequately
       disclose any comprehensible cause of action.
       2.
       (PoC) in respect of the factual and legal allegations made
       against the Defendant such that the PoC do not adequately comply
       with CPR 16.4.
       3.
       particulars fail to specify the required "period of parking". A
       single timestamp, or evidence showing only a moment in time and
       is not capable of constituting a period of parking.
       4.
       contract and consumer law require that a consumer be given a
       reasonable opportunity to read and understand contractual terms
       before any contract can be formed.
       5.
       instantaneous contract arising the moment a vehicle stops. Such
       a proposition is inherently contradictory: if a driver stopped
       in order to read the terms displayed on the signage, that very
       act of stopping would itself constitute the alleged breach.
       6.
       the terms is prevented by the claimant's own contractual
       framework. Such an arrangement is unfair, predatory, and
       incapable of creating a binding contract.
       7.
       a.
       terms are pleaded or exhibited, contrary to CPR PD 16.7.3(1);
       b.
       clauses) of the terms and conditions of the contract (or
       contracts) which is/are relied on;
       c.
       breach is said to have occurred (a timestamp alone is
       insufficient);
       d.
       sued as the driver or the keeper of the vehicle, as the claimant
       cannot plead alternative causes of action without specificity.
       8.
       driver at the material time. The claimant's own video evidence
       does not identify me as either the driver or a passenger. I am
       under no legal obligation to name the driver and I decline to do
       so.
       9.
       mandatory requirements of Schedule 4 of the Protection of
       Freedoms Act 2012 ("PoFA"). And as such it is denied that the
       claimant is able to recover charges from the registered keeper
       under PoFA.
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