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#Post#: 863--------------------------------------------------
Manifestdestiny [RiverClan]
DIR By: dawny
Date: November 24, 2012, 6:08 pm
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Name. Manifestdestiny
Age. 18 moons
Alliance. RiverClan
Rank. Warrior?
Gender. Male
Appearance. Manifestdestiny is a large and deadly looking cat,
with broad shoulders, and a thick set jaw. He has a long, and
think chocolate tabby coat, which protects him when the harsh
winter rolls around. He also has two white paws, a white muzzle,
and a white locket, making him look rather sophisticated. His
eyes are a copper amber color, which will strike fear into your
very heart, that is if you have one.
Personality. Manifestdestiny or Manny is a fluffy sweetheart,
and a very lovable one at that. Although his appearance makes
him look big and bad, he really isn't, unless you hurt a kit, or
a ThunderClan cat, you had better beware. He is easy to make
friends with, but if you make him an enemy he will never let go
of the fact that he hates you, and will probably never forgive
you. He is slow to anger, and quick to take a joke, as long as
it isn't mean, he is fine, he will laugh at his mistakes but
learn from them.
History. Manny was born in RiverClan, his parents died of
greencough one moon before his apprentice ceremony was to take
place. He became an apprentice and trained very hard, but his
training was cut short when he sprained his paw. This put him
out for around two moons, which he had to spend flicking his
tail in the medicine cat den. After he recovered he worked extra
hard, and soon became a warrior, for his courage and honor, and
his unwillingness to be unloyal. After becoming a warrior, for a
brief period in time he lost all hope, and sight of everything,
and he is now in this state, wishing that the world would just
collapse on him.
Role Play sample. Manifestdestiny paced back and forth as he
impatiently waited for the rest of the patrol to gather. He may
be fed up with his life, but that was nothing compared to having
a nice hunting trip. Hunting was his favorite passtime, or
occupation, or whatever other cats would call it. Finally the
other cats showed up and they left for their hunting trip. But,
the huntingtrip was cut short when poor little Manifestdestiny
stepped on a thorn, and it got lodged into his pad so deep that
it could not be pulled out. Grumbling an complaining he limped
to the medicine cat den hating every minute of it,
#Post#: 869--------------------------------------------------
Re: Manifestdestiny [ThunderClan]
DIR By: EVERLASTiNG
Date: November 24, 2012, 6:12 pm
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Hi Dawny!
Before I can approve you, there are a few things you must
correct.
-- Technically, you last sentence in your appearance is a
fragment, so you need to lengthen it somehow.
-- You have some choppy sentences scattered throughout your bio.
#Post#: 887--------------------------------------------------
Re: Manifestdestiny [RiverClan]
DIR By: dawny
Date: November 24, 2012, 6:18 pm
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[center]Better?
#Post#: 890--------------------------------------------------
Re: Manifestdestiny [RiverClan]
DIR By: EVERLASTiNG
Date: November 24, 2012, 6:19 pm
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Yep!
Beautiful bio, approved.
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