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asdfghjkl;' [p, ever]
DIR By: mocking
Date: November 25, 2012, 3:25 pm
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HELLO EVERRRRRRR
TRAIN ME
#Post#: 1951--------------------------------------------------
Re: asdfghjkl;' [p, ever]
DIR By: EVERLASTiNG
Date: November 25, 2012, 3:26 pm
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Okay. c: The site's official bio approver is here!
Now, tell me what a choppy sentence is and give me an example.
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Re: asdfghjkl;' [p, ever]
DIR By: mocking
Date: November 25, 2012, 3:28 pm
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A choppy sentence is a sentence that doesn't really flow well
with the others.
ex:
She looked happy. She smiled at him. She grinned.
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Re: asdfghjkl;' [p, ever]
DIR By: EVERLASTiNG
Date: November 25, 2012, 3:33 pm
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Sort of. Take this, for example:
Examplepaw's ears are very fluffy. Examplepaw's tail is very
fluffy. Examplepaw's eyes are dark blue and contrast his
fluffyness. Examplepaw's paws are fluffy. Examplepaw's torso is
fluffy. Examplepaw is just very fluffy.
Take it as something that doesn't sound right or rolls off the
tongue in an abnormal manner.
Now, correct what's above into something less choppy. c:
#Post#: 1964--------------------------------------------------
Re: asdfghjkl;' [p, ever]
DIR By: mocking
Date: November 25, 2012, 3:36 pm
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Overall Examplepaw's body is very fluffy--not limited to her/his
ears, tail, torso, and paws. His/her eyes are different,
however--they are a shade of dark blue that contrasts against
his fluffly pelt.
//is a fail
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Re: asdfghjkl;' [p, ever]
DIR By: EVERLASTiNG
Date: November 25, 2012, 3:39 pm
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You used fluffy twice. c: Try to use diverse adjectives:
Examplepaw is an extremely fluffy cat. His/her entire body is
covered in dense, plentiful fur. Although his pelt is thick and
brightly colored, his eyes are a subtly blue that contrast
greatly against his luxurious fur.
Okay, let's move on.
This is going to be very easy. This is just about clan names and
things like that:
OrangePaw lives in Riverclan.
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Re: asdfghjkl;' [p, ever]
DIR By: mocking
Date: November 25, 2012, 3:41 pm
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//facepalm
I'm sorry, I definitely usually do better than that xD kind of
multitasking.
Orangepaw lives in RiverClan.
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Re: asdfghjkl;' [p, ever]
DIR By: EVERLASTiNG
Date: November 25, 2012, 3:52 pm
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On The Way To Neverland lives in The Tribe Of Rushing Water.
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Re: asdfghjkl;' [p, ever]
DIR By: mocking
Date: November 25, 2012, 4:33 pm
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XDDD Love that name
On the Way to Neverland lives in The Tribe of Rushing Water.
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