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Re: Story and Art Launchpad
By: PhilSrobeighn Date: July 2, 2012, 7:37 am
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[quote author=Giant_Neckbeard link=topic=16.msg1067#msg1067
date=1341225270]
Can I post yet, Phil?
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My bad Neckbeard, sorry. Yes, go.
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Re: Story and Art Launchpad
By: Giant_Neckbeard Date: July 2, 2012, 11:16 am
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Posting the story, in two parts, right now.
Oh, Gods, please let this work!
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Re: Story and Art Launchpad
By: Lord Anubis Date: July 5, 2012, 10:54 pm
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Making this thread a sticky too, as next week marks the time to
start dropping our stories that explicitly mention Cleveland,
Spaghetti Land, and the beginnings of the park and invasion.
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Re: Story and Art Launchpad
By: fluff_n_stuff Date: July 6, 2012, 8:12 am
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Part one of the sewer fluffies story:
Sewer Fluffies are kind of gross
>You used to have a damn good life until that Christmas Eve a
drunk driver took out your wife and kids.
>Now the only thing that fills your life as you wait for the end
is your job.
>The huge tunnels hum with the quiet industry of a unique theme
park for fluffies, but otherwise it's quiet.
>It'll be another few months before the place opens, so it's
your job to make sure the disposal system works.
>"Litter Boxes" are everywhere, and they all feed into this big
ass central pipe: A 24" pressurized culvert that sends solid and
liquid waste down to a central holding tank of a few hundred
thousand gallons.
>From there, it's pumped out into train cars and sold across the
Midwest as fertilizer.
>It's all pretty clever, and if you gave a shit, you'd actually
have respect for the engineer that built this place.
>But for right now, you just keep checking the pipes one by one
to make sure they're moving at the specified interval.
>It's late though, and you're supposed to be off the clock
already.
>You'd rather be in these tunnels than that big, empty house.
>You look up from your clipboard to see a filthy red fluffy
unicorn staring up at you.
>As popular as these things are, you've never seen one this
close before.
>"How'd you get down here?" you ask the fluffy.
>"Got wost," he says. "Dun know wheh hewd go. It dawk an scawy
down heh!"
>"Well, let's get you back up the surface," you say. "This is no
place for a fluffy pony."
>You move to pick up the unicorn, and he cringes away.
>"Dun huwt fwuffy!" he whimpers. "No be bad! Am gud fwuffy! No
wan go up dere!"
>"I'm not going to hurt you," you tell him. "I'm just going to
get you out of here."
>"Wike it down here!" he says. "Hewd down heh!"
>...okay, so there's more than one of these critters down here.
>"Let's go find them then," you tell the fluffy.
>"Hewd wiv at big gwate!" he says. "Wookin fow nummies an gawt
wost."
>Big grate? He must be taking about the storm drains, which
means that this fluffy actually lives in the sewers.
>Makes sense. The fluffy is heavily matted with all the
atrocities one would expect of such an environment.
>Luckily, you've spent plenty of time in the sewers around here,
and you know exactly where he's talking about.
>It's less than a quarter of a mile, so you grab your
flashlight, and head out.
>Make a note to patch the hole where that fluffy got it so more
don't wander into the bowels of the park.
>You walk with the critter for a while as he babbles on about
the "wite wall nummies" that are "icky bu fiww bewwy."
>You assume he's talking about the fat that accumulates along
sewer walls. It's gross, but if they can live off it, good for
them.
>You eventually come to a huge storm drain where dozens of
really filthy fluffies are playing.
>These are the dirtiest creatures you've ever laid eyes one.
>The biggest one, a huge blue fluffy, marches over to you and
puffs out his cheeks.
>He's covered from hoof to hip in scars, and he's missing an
eye.
>Still not intimidated by him though.
>"Wat you wan, hooman?" he demands. "Go way! Dis ow home! No
botheh hoomans! Wiv in seweh cause meanie hoomans gif big owies
up dere!"
>"Nuu!" protests the red unicorn. "Dun be meanie Cuwvewt! Dis
hooman hewp Dwain git back!" says the red pegasus.
>"Your name is Dwayne?" you aks.
>"Not Dwain, Dwain!"
>Oh, Drain. Because he's a sewer fluffy, right.
>"Yoo hewp fwuffies den?" asks Culvert. "Dank yo hooman! Aww
fwuffies gif hooman huggies!"
>The herd rises from the murky floor of the sewer and start
waddling toward you.
>Oh hell no. You've not getting covered in... whatever it is
that they're covered in.
>"I'm allergic to hugs!" you blurt.
>"Wha awergic?" asks Drain. "Dat good ting? Mean we gif
huggies?"
>"It means I'll die I you hug me," you say.
>"No wan fwiend hooman die!" cries the herd. "Hooman nice! Bwing
Dwain back!"
>"So yeah, I'm just going to head back then," you say before
leaving the storm drain behind.
>Fluffies are kind of gross, living in the sewers like that.
Can't imagine anyone wanting them as a pet.
>Not only that, they're just so filthy. You've had to assemble
an entire massive pumping system just to deal with the expected
volume of shit they're going to put out.
>Where the hell is that door back in anyway?
>It takes you a minute to realize that you're lost.
>Not only that, you haven't seen a manhole cover in a while, so
you can't even exit to the streets.
>And of course your flashlight is dying. God damnit, Miguel left
it off the charger again.
>You stand in the dark for a few minutes, trying to let your
eyes adjust to the lack of light when you realize that there's
not going to BE any light.
>Now you're lost and in the dark. Fuckin' hell.
>What's worrying you now is that there's these glowing things
moving toward you, like a bunch of glowing marker caps.
>"Hi fwiend!" calls a familar voice. "Wat you doin way out heh?"
>It's Drain. The cadre of unicorns he's got with him all have
their horns aglow to shed a tiny bit of light in the sewer
tunnels.
>"You know a way out of here?" you ask them.
>"Hooman hewp fwuffy, so fwuffy hewp hooman!"
>You follow the fluffy for a while, and he leads you right back
to the entrance to the theme park. What a kind little critter.
>"Thank you," you say. "Can I give you anything?"
>"Haf nummies?" asks Drain. "Waww nummies icky, but eat dem aww
cause no otheh nummies."
>"I'll bring some for you tomorrow," you say. "Anything else you
guys need?"
>Drain looks like he's thinking really hard.
>"Wan gif huggies, bu you awergic so no gif huggies."
>Well, maybe one can't hurt. They are supposed to be really good
at giving hugs, and maybe it'll make you feel better after
wandering around the sewers for an hour.
>"Alright, you can give me just one."
>"Yay! Huggies!" The fluffy unicorn wraps his stubby legs around
your leg and gives you hug.
>It's not like your boots weren't covered in shit anyway.
>"Tank yoo hooman!" says Drain. "We fwiends now?
>"Sure thing," you say. "See you tomorrow."
>The unicorns all cheer, and wander away.
>It is nice to have someone to talk to, even if it is a fluffy
pony. You find yourself wondering if you really will see them
tomorrow.
>They come back a few minutes later.
>"Dwayne, we wost again."
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Re: Story and Art Launchpad
By: Lord Anubis Date: July 6, 2012, 8:31 am
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Hehe, nice addition to the ending.
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Re: Story and Art Launchpad
By: PhilSrobeighn Date: July 6, 2012, 10:14 am
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We've got a lot to post before Spaghetti Land opens, so I'd say
go ahead and launch that one.
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Re: Story and Art Launchpad
By: Lord Anubis Date: July 6, 2012, 5:08 pm
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Moved Neckbeard's story to the Story Bits thread. I would get it
finished soon, then repost it in the launchpad for final green
light. It's early on in the chronology, so it'll be good to
publish right after.
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Re: Story and Art Launchpad
By: Tabula_Rojo Date: July 7, 2012, 12:08 am
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finally posting a story here for review
it kind of looses steam toward the end, but whateves
>You are a chubby little fluffy unicorn stallion named Buddy
>You have a white coat and dark red mane and tail
>You are a very happy Fluffy!
>You are lucky enough to have a really nice Daddy
>Sure most Fluffies think they have nice Daddies
>But you are pretty sure you have the nicest Daddy around
>Mostly because your daddy stays home every day and plays with
you!
>He only ever leaves to get yummy nummies for you and himself
>Although on most days he spends a real long time staring at his
“waptop”
>And when he’s busy doing that he won’t play with you
>But that’s okay cause when he he gives you scratchies behind
your ears instead
>You love your daddy and he always says how much he loves you
and how good you are
>He says you’re good cause you try your best to be quiet when
he’s busy
>You almost never make bad poopies…
>Except for that time you got tummy owies from eating garbage
nummies
>But that’s another story
>One night you and your daddy were watching the “teebee”
>”Meanie Hoomin Wif Cane” says funny things
>You and Daddy laugh as he hand feeds you popcorn
>Meanie Hoomin goes away
>”YAY! Time fo’ co-mer-shals!” you shout
>Daddy doesn’t like co-mer-shals
>But since you’re a good fluffy he lets you watch them
>First co-mer-shal starts
>Funny little lizard munsta says lots of big words in his silly
voice
>His silly voice always makes you laugh
>Lizard munsta goes away
>Next you see a breath taking sight
>A Mountain Of Spaghetti!
>Literally a mountain! You can tell the scale from the houses
around it
>There’s a voice saying something but you’re too entranced by
the power of Spaghetti to listen
>Then the camera cuts away and you see a bunch of other
Fluffies!
>They’re frolicking and playing with a shiny red ball on a big
field of green grassies!
>Some others are being lead around on leashes or being carried
by their Mommies and Daddies
>One Fluffy and his daddy go up to a nice Mista in a funny hat
and he gives them a bowl of Spaghetti!
>Then the camera cuts to a blue earth fluffy that says “Fwuffy
wuv sketti wand! Bwring you fwuffies to Sketti wand in
Cweavwand!”
>That’s the spaghetti strand that broke the fluffy’s back
>You jump on your back hooves and put your fore hooves on your
daddy’s chest
>”Daddy! Daddy! Wan go tah Cweavwand! Go tah Sketties Wand!” you
beg with all your might
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>Watching a recording of House with Buddy
>That Hugh Laurie keeps the two of you in stitches
>Although you doubt Buddy actually “gets it”
>Anyway commercials come on
>You sigh
>You can’t stand commercials
>Half the reason you got a DVR in the first place
>But they seem to make Buddy happy so when you two are watching
together you let them run
>After a spot for Geico an Ad comes up that seems to really grab
Buddy’s attention
>Looks like an Ad for some new tourist trap in Cleveland
>Spaghetti Land? The Fuck? Stupidest name ever
>Although you have to admit those Fluffies and their owners do
seem to be having fun
>At the end they managed to get a Fluffy to do a proper line
read
>You’re impressed
>It’s at this point that you find Buddy actually getting off his
chubby little fluffy ass
>He’s begging to go to “Sketties Wand”
>His big brown eyes filled with passion
>You consider this for a moment
>Cleveland is not too terribly far
>And you can tell this would make Buddy REALLY happy
>You check your cell
>Your schedule is open around the time the park opens later this
month
>"Alright Buddy" you say scratching him behind the ears "We'll
go"
>Buddy gasps in excitement as his eyes light up
>Buddy jumps onto the floor and bounds about the room
>"WE GOIN TAH SKETTIES WAND! WE GOIN TAH SKETTIES WAND! WE GOIN
TAH SKETTIES WAND!" He chants with glee
>You haven't seen him move his fat fluffy ass like that since he
was a little colt
>He stops and tugs on your pant leg
>"Wets go Daddy!" he grabs his leash from the shelf next to the
door
>He beams widely with the leash in his teeth
>You laugh at his enthusiasm
>"No Buddy we aren't going now."
>His goofy smile turns to a goofy frown
>He drops his leash and tears well up in his eyes
>"W-we not goin tah sketties wand?" He says with sniffle
>"Of course we're going you Silly Fluffy" you say with a
reassuring scratch behind his ears
>"We'll go at the end of the month, think you can wait that
long?"
>Buddy contemplates this for a good 10 minutes
>You take this time to cue up your House recording
>You're used to his slow mental processing by now but you still
wonder if you may have broken him
>"Otay Daddy!" He finally says with a smile "Buddy can wait"
>Now that that’s settled, you need to hit the head
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>You are SO EXCITED!
>Daddy says you’re going to Sketties Wand
>Not right now though
>At the end of the “month”
>You aren’t sure how long a “month” is, but you hope the of it
end is coming soon
>After you tell daddy you can wait he gets up from his big soft
thing
>He has to “go to the bathroom”
>That’s his way of saying he has to make poopies
>Silly Daddy he should say what he means, and mean what he says
>You decide to go poopies too
>Your litter box is out on the big wood place that daddy calls
“The Deck”
>You go through your special door and waddle happily over to the
litter box
>You’re still so excited!
>After you finish, you hear a noise in the grass
>It’s almost dark time but it’s still bright enough for you to
see
>You look out in the grass and see a bunch of other Fluffy
Ponies!
>”HI NEW FWENDS!” you shout waving your stubby little hoof
>As they come closer to the deck you notice they’re kind of
dirty
>Furthermore they don’t smell pretty, but you’re in too good a
mood for that to bother you
>You are met with a cacophony of greetings and other babble
>”Hi new fwiend!” “Fwuffy wuv new fwiend” “Gif huggies?” “Gif
nummies?”
>You are eager to share the good news you have
>”Fwuffies, mai Daddy is takin me to Sketties Wand!”
>”Wah Sketties Wand? Fwuffy wuv Sketties” asks an inquisitive
young stallion
>”Sketties Wand da bes pwace evah! Deres gween gwassies fo’
pwaying in, shiny wed bawws to woll awound, an aww da sketties
yuu can eat!” you explain excitedly to the gathered masses
>”Whewe is dis pwace?” another fluffy asks
>You take in a deep breath and pause for dramatic effect
>
>”CWEAVWAND!”
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Re: Story and Art Launchpad
By: Lord Anubis Date: July 7, 2012, 12:24 am
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A fluffy waiting by the door, leash in mouth, like an eager
puppy, is just too darn cute a mental image.
An excellent story, and one to be submitted sometime this week.
I made one minor fix, changing 'daddys' to 'daddies' near the
start.
Since tomorrow (well, according to my clock, technically today)
is going to be the start of our explicit name drops to Spaghetti
Land and Cleveland, I need to see everyone's stories that deal
with the leadup to Spaghetti Land's opening posted here ASAP.
Once I've given them all the final check, I'll work up a
tentative post schedule. That way we can space out our posts,
let the anticipation mount, and I'll do my best to arrange them
in as close to chronological order as I can.
It's showtime, everyone. Man your stations!
To make it clear, this week will be for stories that deal with
the time period leading up to Spaghetti Land's opening. The
building of the park, the movements of the herds, the fuzzy pony
development and trials, and everything else in between.
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Re: Story and Art Launchpad
By: Tabula_Rojo Date: July 7, 2012, 12:43 am
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[quote author=Lord Anubis link=topic=16.msg1196#msg1196
date=1341638656]
A fluffy waiting by the door, leash in mouth, like an eager
puppy, is just too darn cute a mental image.
[/quote]
perhaps we should get one of our artists to draw it maybe? >>
and also yeah I'll make it into a greentext image tomorrow
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