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#Post#: 8199--------------------------------------------------
Smoking_ may I ask your help again please?
By: nataliestpete Date: October 21, 2018, 5:24 pm
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Hello,
Sorry for asking your help again while I don't contribute to the
forum these days. I'll do soon.
I'm thinking about placing information which inform the hotel's
guests that smoking is forbidden in the hotel Could you please
correct the meaning and mistakes please. It's a really hard
issue as besides possible mistakes, it's full of the underwater
stones. Thank you
"Dear Guests,
We would like to remind you that according to the Russian
Federation Law smoking is strictly forbidden in rooms and public
place of the hotel.
The hotel is equipped with a fire alarm and smokes detectors
which react any fume.
The compensation fee for cleaning and a false call (?) of a
fire team( brigade?) is 10 000 RUB each time (case).
Thank you for understanding (?) "
Also, I’m not sure if it’s a good idea to write “ Thank you for
understanding” in such cases.
“A false call of a fire brigade” - it comes getting a warning
automatically. This is the idea.
Thank you
#Post#: 8200--------------------------------------------------
Re: Smoking_ may I ask your help again please?
By: NealC Date: October 21, 2018, 5:32 pm
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Dear Guests,
We would like to remind you that according to Russian Federation
Law smoking is strictly forbidden in all private rooms as well
as the public places of the hotel.
The hotel is equipped with fire alarms and smoke detectors which
will react to any fumes.
The compensation fee for cleaning and the false alarm sent to
the local fire brigade is 10,000 RUB for each occurrence.
Thank you for understanding
you might want to tighten the once sentence:
The fee for cleaning and the fine for the false alarm sent to
the local fire brigade is 10,000 RUB for each occurrence. This
fee will be charged to your bill, with NO exceptions.
#Post#: 8202--------------------------------------------------
Re: Smoking_ may I ask your help again please?
By: nataliestpete Date: October 21, 2018, 5:39 pm
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[quote author=NealC link=topic=547.msg8200#msg8200
date=1540161121]
you might want to tighten the once sentence:
The fee for cleaning and the fine for the false alarm sent to
the local fire brigade is 10,000 RUB for each occurrence. This
fee will be charged to your bill, with NO exceptions.
[/quote]
Thank you, Neal <3 for this point
I definitely would like to do so. How about the rest of the
text? Is it ok?
#Post#: 8204--------------------------------------------------
Re: Smoking_ may I ask your help again please?
By: NealC Date: October 21, 2018, 6:02 pm
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Looks fine :-)
Dear Guests,
We would like to remind you that according to Russian Federation
Law smoking is strictly forbidden in all private rooms as well
as the public places of the hotel.
This hotel is equipped with fire alarms and smoke detectors
which will react to any fumes.
The fee for cleaning and the fine for the false alarm sent to
the local fire brigade is 10,000 RUB for each occurrence. This
fee will be charged to your bill, with NO exceptions.
Thank you for understanding
#Post#: 8212--------------------------------------------------
Re: Smoking_ may I ask your help again please?
By: SHL Date: October 22, 2018, 1:19 am
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Your last re-write is best Neal.
#Post#: 8215--------------------------------------------------
Re: Smoking_ may I ask your help again please?
By: nataliestpete Date: October 22, 2018, 1:35 am
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I’ve just thought that I need “a” before fire alarm and it
should be in a single form, right? ( I wrote in plural).
Thank you
#Post#: 8216--------------------------------------------------
Re: Smoking_ may I ask your help again please?
By: NealC Date: October 22, 2018, 2:11 am
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In English fire alarm is vague in its meaning. Your hotel might
sound under equipped if you left it singular.
How about:
This hotel is equipped with a state of the art fire alarm system
including smoke detectors which will react to any fumes
You can only say that if it truly is an excellent system. What
do you think?
#Post#: 8219--------------------------------------------------
Re: Smoking_ may I ask your help again please?
By: nataliestpete Date: October 22, 2018, 2:49 am
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[quote author=NealC link=topic=547.msg8216#msg8216
date=1540192303]
In English fire alarm is vague in its meaning. Your hotel might
sound under equipped if you left it singular.
How about:
This hotel is equipped with a state of the art fire alarm system
including smoke detectors which will react to any fumes
You can only say that if it truly is an excellent system. What
do you think?
[/quote]
Oh, I see. I couldn’t think so. I mean a singular form of “ fire
alarm” might mean under equipped. Should I add “ the” then
please? Thank you
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Re: Smoking_ may I ask your help again please?
By: NealC Date: October 22, 2018, 7:12 am
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Well if you don't want to say "state of the art" then:
This hotel is equipped with a fire alarm system including smoke
detectors which will react to any fumes
#Post#: 8251--------------------------------------------------
Re: Smoking_ may I ask your help again please?
By: SHL Date: October 22, 2018, 7:22 pm
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Neal,
Blonde could give the guests in the hotel a fire drill like
this,
HTML https://youtu.be/FlE47GckHRA
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