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       memoir draft 1
       By: ellacaudill Date: March 24, 2014, 2:17 pm
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       not quite done yet!
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       Re: memoir draft 1
       By: pruittp1 Date: April 1, 2014, 3:54 pm
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       When you introduce the three friends, you don't say much about
       Whitney. Both Kelsey and Meredith are given descriptions, but
       not Whitney.
       Weirdo's is possessive. Weirdos is plural.
       Seems to be a bit of focus shifting in that first paragraph. It
       goes from first person singular to first person plural. I can
       understand it, because you're talking about how you grouped up
       with these girls; perhaps hold onto the plural forms until after
       you've introduced Kelsey, Meredith, and Whitney?
       Your bit about being professionals made me laugh, but it's
       lumped together with Mark's admonition. Could just be a
       formatting thing as the rest of your dialogue is separated.
       Good sensory details throughout the garden infiltration.
       Certainly gave the feeling of being in on a clandestine prank.
       Good times.
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       Re: memoir draft 1
       By: prestelo Date: April 7, 2014, 7:38 am
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       Weirdo’s should be weirdos, I like your word choice (ie qualms,
       irksome), good way to describe characters through comparison,
       confusing sentence “I genuinely enjoyed being by myself where I
       didn’t feel like I couldn’t be myself”, maybe describe Whitney a
       little more, good descriptions about the weather and setting
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