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Final Fantasy Paper
By: sarafredrick Date: February 26, 2014, 8:27 pm
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Attached!
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Re: Final Fantasy Paper
By: vanesse3 Date: February 27, 2014, 4:30 pm
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-You did really good job describing Ginger I can really tell
the difference from the last draft, now I am able to decide I
really don't like her from the beginning
-When you say in the flick of a wrist Marsha was tied up again,
I was kind of confused where did she go exaclty?
-I like how you describe the vat of green sludge, very
descriptive
-"Marco put his sword down and tried to hug Marsha into him
tightly" this sentence is confusing
-The pacing of your story is really good I never felt bored!
-You did a good job adding to the story from your last draft
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Re: Final Fantasy Paper
By: oliver Date: March 9, 2014, 6:11 am
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You did a good job of making me really dislike Ginger.
I like the dynamics between Marsha and Marco.
I like the happy ending!
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