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       The Corner Men
       By: pruittp1 Date: February 26, 2014, 8:17 am
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       Re-uploaded from Fantasy 2 file.
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       Re: The Corner Men
       By: ellacaudill Date: February 28, 2014, 4:21 pm
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       I like all of the inner thoughts of Imogen, they add some comic
       relief or clarification. Be sure to emphasize the things you are
       trying to show and not tell so it's easier to understand
       entirely Like when Fintan touches Imogen ands calms her downs
       somehow and then she says, "...What you just....did, none of it
       is normal." I didn't realize what he did exactly so if you were
       to explain what she felt more when he touched her than it would
       make more sense.
       “I am Fintan, child of Brighid, prince of the Fae, and heir to
       the Throne of Fire. My name forges the Dawn Path and rides the
       whispers of the night. I bring light to the dark and warmth to
       the cold. I burn with white-hot flame and turn my foes to ash
       with a single touch.”
       This paragraph is a little confusing only because there is a lot
       of unexplained information in it.
       Overall your story is super creative and original and I liked
       how it wasn't a typical fantasy story in any way.
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       Re: The Corner Men
       By: prestelo Date: March 3, 2014, 11:16 pm
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       Really enjoyed your style of writing, I found it comical and
       original. One thing I had issue with was the lack of context; I
       found that it was difficult to follow in some places because of
       this. I thought you did a great job developing your characters
       though, through their actions, words, descriptions, and even the
       comparison and contrast of the two.
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