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final
By: oliver Date: February 26, 2014, 6:59 am
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asdas
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response to Oliver's final
By: Carly21 Date: February 26, 2014, 8:31 pm
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- Great additions!
- The grammatical issues that I noticed in the last draft are
gone
- I really like the sensory details that you added in today's
class. It definitely adds to the story.
- I thought your story is very well paced and not too busy with
information. I enjoyed reading your story and I was intrigued
throughout.
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Re: final
By: vanesse3 Date: February 27, 2014, 5:03 pm
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-I like how you added the part when Margret dies that shows that
she actual does die, helps the reader understand it better
-I like the more descriptive ending you added, it wraps the
story up well
-I can tell you made some minor changes and they work well
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Re: final
By: sarafredrick Date: February 28, 2014, 6:37 pm
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-The pacing of this final piece is much better! It no longer
feels jumpy when you switch to different character scenes
-Also seems like more imagery and sensory detail was added!
-Your story is definitely an easy read. I love the plot and I
think it's very clear what is going on. I did not struggle to
continue reading!
Happy spring break!
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