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The Lords of Order and Chaos - Written by Winfred Ou
By: K Date: April 18, 2015, 8:32 pm
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[center]Prologue[/center]
It was a late autumn night. The breeze carried with it the scent
of fresh cut hay and wheat. A farmer who had been working hard
all day, cutting the wheat and crops whose aroma is now present
in the air, decided to turn in and hit the hay. He stood on the
veranda of his little brick cottage and sighed contently as he
gazed at the half emptied fields. It was proving to be an
excellent harvest; the crops flourished early on in the year and
remained healthy throughout, yielding double what his family had
expected. A smile lit up his face as he decided what to do with
the profit of the yield. A cow would really hit the spot and
provide some nutrition to their meagre diet. The farmer licked
his dry lips at the prospect of fresh milk. Still smiling, he
turned and entered his cottage. His wife and his two sons were
sleeping fitfully. He had sent them, after a long hard day, off
to bed an hour ago. It was time that he too had joined them in
their dreams, good or bad. As he donned his nightshirt he looked
out the window, he had yet to close the wooden shutters. He rose
from the chair he sat on as he tugged on his heavily patched
trousers and moved quietly to the window, his definition of
quiet usually meant stomping in his thick-soled boots. As he
prepared to pull the oak shutters close he saw a shooting star
illuminate the night sky. This one was unlike most he had seen
before, and he’s seen plenty in his years. It burned a bright
green as it fell from the heavens, leaving a long, sweeping tail
in its wake. The farmer took it as a good sign for the coming
year; he prayed and wished for some more wealth to come before
he drew the shutters closed.
Unbeknownst to the farmer, or anyone else who cared to lift
their heads to the heavens, the meteor, as it were, dug its own
grave in the center of Wen Oblib – deep in the Mirror Realm.
There, the heart of a civilization that would bring bloodshed in
the millions to the land of Eitan would take its hold on the
land and grow in power. Hailing from the stars, the Floral
Empire shall rise again - as it did in many other lands in the
vast sea of stars. The Great War for Eitan has begun.
[spoiler=Contents]
[spoiler=Chapters 1-5]
Chapter 1
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Chapter 4
Chapter 5
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Re: The Lords of Order and Chaos - Written by Winfred Ou
By: K Date: April 18, 2015, 8:57 pm
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The first chapter's up, as I promised. Enjoy!
[center]1[/center]
A girl sat on a rock outside a tavern. She was small and lean.
Her skin, originally pale is now tanned into a very light shade
of brown. Her hair is straight and mid-length of a dark brown
colour. She has green, average sized eyes. Karin was what they
called her.
Karin nodded vigorously as her brother told her about how much
he enjoyed cooking. Her brother was quite tall and broad in the
shoulders. His skin, like hers, was tanned into that same shade
of brown like that of most people in the village. His hair was
straight and brown, he never really took any heed to it, but his
hair was always what most people called ‘perfect’. He looked at
Karin now with his brown eyes as be described how well he
seasoned the lamb.
Karin’s real name was Zsofia, Zsofia Reynder, but no one really
managed to remember that, so she opted for Karin instead. She
shifted her position for about the hundredth that day as sitting
on a rock wasn’t the most comfortable of places she could name.
She suddenly felt a little upset as her brother described how
everyone praised the lamb he cooked for the village yesterday.
Cooking was her job, but in truth, she never out performed her
brother. Her brother had a real passion from cooking, his
creativity lead him to experiment in flavours which often
resulted in heavenly delights. No, she wasn’t jealous, she
simply wants to do well. Zarathushtra Reynder, her brother,
continued to describe how he made the lamb taste so good. He saw
how much his sister wanted to be able to cook well and tried to
pass on as much tips as he could to her. She took the tips in
well and he watched her honing her skills in the kitchen very
often, usually in secret. He saw something move. He continued to
describe his methods of cooking the perfect lamb with just as
much enthusiasm as before, but his attention was now focused on
a mountain of hay to the left some metres away. He picked up a
loose rock beside him and hurled it into the loose straw
fortress, all the while talking about how to keep a piece of
lamb tender in the oven. A tall figure rose from behind the pile
of dried grass.
“Can I ever get past you, your watchfulness?” Zdravko Reynder,
Zarathushtra’s twin brother, asked as he shook his head in
admiration. Zdravko was taller than Zarathushtra, but not as
broad in the shoulders. His skin, like his sister’s was the
light, very light, shade of brown. Zarathushtra and Zdravko were
identical twins. He had the same hair, straight and brown,
thought he took care of it a lot more. He has the same brown
eyes as his brother too.
“Yes, if you are as good as they say, Drako” Zarathushtra
replied in a tone that brooked no argument. Drako was the
nickname they’ve adopted for Zdravko. He had seen his brother in
action, or rather; he had never seen his brother in action. When
it came to stealth, Zdravko wasn’t just like a shadow, Zdravko
is a shadow. “So,” Zarathushtra began, trying to change the
topic, “What did the Union do this time?” ‘The Union’
Zarathushtra mentioned is called the ‘True Gentlemen’s Union’.
It is a group of ‘True Gentlemen’ who live their normal lives
under a strict code. Zdravko is a junior member of this
organization.
“We paid Old Avery a visit after his farm was attacked by a
wolf. We had to kill it; there was no other way,” Drako said
regretfully as he sat down, beside Karin and Zarathushtra, on
the rock.
Zarathushtra patted him gently on the back, “You did the right
thing, it’s okay.” One of the primary rules of the union is
minimal violence; gentlemen talked it out, not fight at the
slightest disturbance. Drako’s tone spoke volumes of how devoted
to the union he was.
“I know Zara. I know.” Drako told him. Zara was the pet name
they’ve given Zarathushtra. “I just wished we didn’t need to.”
Zara nodded in understanding, “It’s like when someone overcooks
meat. The animal’s already been slaughter once; you don’t need
to kill it a second time.”
Karin nodded in agreement, “Yes, like black eggs and bacon. It’s
not pleasant.”
“Obviously,” Drako said, trying to lighten up the mood, “food is
a language you both speak.” Both Zara and Karin smiled and
nodded vigorously. “Speaking of food, look at the time” Drako
continued, “time we headed back to the inn.”
The next Chapter would be up on the 3rd of May.
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Re: The Lords of Order and Chaos - Written by Winfred Ou
By: Oafish Team Date: April 18, 2015, 9:02 pm
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I was wait for this new chapter since you refused to tell me in
real life.
Now I know why...
You put me in the story!
BEST THING EVER!!!
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Re: The Lords of Order and Chaos - Written by Winfred Ou
By: TheCyclonicStorm Date: April 19, 2015, 8:09 am
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Very nice subtle references . . . Describing the way Karin longs
to cook and the way she seems to have conflicting emotions - of
a sort - regarding her brother and his skill at cooking - is
very well done (sorry, couldn't resist the pun.)
Also, Karin, do I now have a representation of what you look
like? No? Eh.
I hope you're not thinking of putting a sarcastic, oppressive
bastard in there next, K00. :D
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Re: The Lords of Order and Chaos - Written by Winfred Ou
By: Oafish Team Date: April 19, 2015, 7:27 pm
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[quote author=TheCyclonicStorm link=topic=88.msg13129#msg13129
date=1429448976]
Very nice subtle references . . . Describing the way Karin longs
to cook and the way she seems to have conflicting emotions - of
a sort - regarding her brother and his skill at cooking - is
very well done (sorry, couldn't resist the pun.)
Also, Karin, do I now have a representation of what you look
like? No? Eh.
I hope you're not thinking of putting a sarcastic, oppressive
bastard in there next, K00. :D
[/quote]
Nope, That's not my physical appearance...
So... What are you doing, K00?
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Re: The Lords of Order and Chaos - Written by Winfred Ou
By: K Date: April 19, 2015, 7:48 pm
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[quote author=Karin Oafish Team link=topic=88.msg13115#msg13115
date=1429408920]
I was wait for this new chapter since you refused to tell me in
real life.
Now I know why...
You put me in the story!
BEST THING EVER!!!
[/quote]
Yes! Be excited!
[quote author=TheCyclonicStorm link=topic=88.msg13129#msg13129
date=1429448976]
Very nice subtle references . . . Describing the way Karin longs
to cook and the way she seems to have conflicting emotions - of
a sort - regarding her brother and his skill at cooking - is
very well done (sorry, couldn't resist the pun.)
Also, Karin, do I now have a representation of what you look
like? No? Eh.
I hope you're not thinking of putting a sarcastic, oppressive
bastard in there next, K00. :D
[/quote]
Puns... Honestly... That pun is actually quite rare since most
people don't know about cooking.
Slightly... Some of those features are true... I'll leave the
assuming up to you.
*Cough* That'll come down to the random generator.
[quote author=Karin Oafish Team link=topic=88.msg13130#msg13130
date=1429489624]
[quote author=TheCyclonicStorm link=topic=88.msg13129#msg13129
date=1429448976]
Very nice subtle references . . . Describing the way Karin longs
to cook and the way she seems to have conflicting emotions - of
a sort - regarding her brother and his skill at cooking - is
very well done (sorry, couldn't resist the pun.)
Also, Karin, do I now have a representation of what you look
like? No? Eh.
I hope you're not thinking of putting a sarcastic, oppressive
bastard in there next, K00. :D
[/quote]
Nope, That's not my physical appearance...
So... What are you doing, K00?
[/quote]
I didn't want to make the whole cast from scratch so I made some
of them from what I know.
Of course, in this story we aren't the magic welding, body
regenerating, forever living Royal Remnant Knights that we are
in real life.
I think of these charaters as the human embodiments of our
celestial spirits.
BTW, For those that know what I'm talking about, This story is
set in the Mikulas Universe of the Mikulas Multiverse of the
Mikulas Story Realm.
PS: Don't ask me for the plot, you'll ruin it for everyone.
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Re: The Lords of Order and Chaos - Written by Winfred Ou
By: Oafish Team Date: April 19, 2015, 8:13 pm
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[quote author=K00 the Sane link=topic=88.msg13134#msg13134
date=1429490897]
[quote author=Karin Oafish Team link=topic=88.msg13130#msg13130
date=1429489624]
[quote author=TheCyclonicStorm link=topic=88.msg13129#msg13129
date=1429448976]
Very nice subtle references . . . Describing the way Karin longs
to cook and the way she seems to have conflicting emotions - of
a sort - regarding her brother and his skill at cooking - is
very well done (sorry, couldn't resist the pun.)
Also, Karin, do I now have a representation of what you look
like? No? Eh.
I hope you're not thinking of putting a sarcastic, oppressive
bastard in there next, K00. :D
[/quote]
Nope, That's not my physical appearance...
So... What are you doing, K00?
[/quote]
I didn't want to make the whole cast from scratch so I made some
of them from what I know.
Of course, in this story we aren't the magic welding, body
regenerating, forever living Royal Remnant Knights that we are
in real life.
I think of these charaters as the human embodiments of our
celestial spirits.
BTW, For those that know what I'm talking about, This story is
set in the Mikulas Universe of the Mikulas Multiverse of the
Mikulas Story Realm.
PS: Don't ask me for the plot, you'll ruin it for everyone.
[/quote]
That makes sense...
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Re: The Lords of Order and Chaos - Written by Winfred Ou
By: TheCyclonicStorm Date: April 21, 2015, 2:54 am
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Random generator? I wouldn't trust those. "Marijana?"
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Re: The Lords of Order and Chaos - Written by Winfred Ou
By: Oafish Team Date: April 22, 2015, 12:47 am
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[quote author=TheCyclonicStorm link=topic=88.msg13151#msg13151
date=1429602880]
Random generator? I wouldn't trust those. "Marijana?"
[/quote]
What?
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Re: The Lords of Order and Chaos - Written by Winfred Ou
By: K Date: May 2, 2015, 7:25 pm
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[center]2[/center]
The inn was a massive affair. A wide foundation guaranteed
plenty of floor space to the tenets of the tavern. The entire
structure was four stories tall; taller than all but a few
taverns in the land of Eitan. Its stone reinforced walls
sheltered its patrons from the worst of weather as it stood
strong and proud for the past four years. By the name of the
‘Kingdom of Knighthood’, the combined tavern and inn
stood in the small fishing town of Muireadhach.
“After you,” Drako said as he pulled the wooden door
open for his siblings. The door, unlike the rest of the
structure, was pine. Originally oak it was replaced about a year
later; the original door was smashed to splinters as the result
of a drunken brawl.
Karin entered easily, followed by Zara. Unlike in most inns,
Zara hadn’t needed to bend to avoid hitting his head on
the doorframe; Drako made sure of the fact when he designed the
structure four years ago. Whilst Karin headed to the bar, Drako
took the liberty of the lull to unpack his saddle bag after his
long trip. Zara on the other hand headed to the kitchen
immediately to prepare the meal for the night. Everyday Zara
would prepare a special dish for the patrons of the tavern. His
lamb he cooked last night was a huge success.
Karin slid through the orderly rows of tables and chairs to the
bar. A short man with graying blond hair worked there as the
temporary bar tender.
“Afternoon, Patryk,” Karin said with a smile.
Patryk nodded in acknowledgement. “Afternoon,
Karin,” He replied with a grin before he cheerfully
fetched a kettle, his movements made slightly awkward as he
balanced a tray of dishes in the other hand. “You’ll
be having the usual I suppose?”He asked as he set the tray
down on an empty bench. With a nod from Karin he filled the
kettle with tea which had been sitting in a pot, boiling over
the fire. He looked around for a clean tray and frowned slightly
when he found none. “Must have used all the trays during
the lunch hour. I’ll go and-“
Before he finished his sentence and did whatever he was going
to do, he was interrupted as a girl stepped in from a door
behind the bar, leading into the kitchen. The girl was paler
than most people in the town, perhaps this was because she
didn’t going outside as much. Her long, curly brown hair
was knotted in a bun above her head. She was the same age as
Karin and a little higher. In her hands were a tray of freshly
cleaned dishes. She scanned the room with her dark brown eyes,
making sure she wasn’t interrupting Patryk. Finally,
confirmed she wasn’t unwelcome, she smiled.
“Good afternoon, Karin,” She said.
“Afternoon, Zuleika,” Karin replied as she smiled
back.
Patryk stepped forward and gently took the tray from Zuleika.
“Thank you Zulieka.”
Zuleika nodded before piling another tray with greasy dishes and
hurried back to the kitchen.
Patryk stacked the dishes onto a shelf before he set the clean
tray Zuleika had brought on the bench before Karin. He placed
the kettle and three cups on the tray. “Enjoy,” he
stated briefly before he returned to stacking clean plates.
Karin picked up the tray and headed to the table nearest to the
bar. She placed the tray down and sat on the bench, waiting for
her brothers to join her.
The next chapter will be out on the 17th of May, 2015.
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