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Works in Progress
By: JoeClegg Date: June 22, 2020, 11:07 am
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I thought it might be interesting to have a topic for sharing
edited versions of pieces that have been submitted for critique
and that we've been working on. To that end, here are two pieces
that I've submitted recently, which I've been working on based
on highly useful feedback at the sessions.
Robber's Grief (flash fiction):
HTML https://drive.google.com/file/d/1v-NmeXSpmf1vglI1avnfuWAITVi4Fugr/view?usp=sharing
Custard Creams (short story):
HTML https://drive.google.com/file/d/1vp9yaixE1fCwoKhUIGwbNeEr7aPR79OJ/view?usp=sharing
Please post your pieces here too, if you want to show the latest
versions!
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Re: Works in Progress
By: PeterH Date: June 24, 2020, 9:04 am
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Well done! I reread both and Custard Creams was edited so much
that at first I thought I had remembered the ending incorrectly.
Quite a change from the previous version but I like the
additional details and rearranging of events. Nice.
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Re: Works in Progress
By: Nick P Date: June 24, 2020, 10:16 am
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Read Custard Creams again. Really like where you end it now, it
lifts the whole piece. Great job!
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Re: Works in Progress
By: JoeClegg Date: June 24, 2020, 11:10 am
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Thank you guys for reading again!
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Re: Works in Progress
By: Shona Date: June 27, 2020, 5:37 am
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Agreed that the changes to Custard Creams work really well, this
ending is definitely much stronger! (Though contrary to some
other opinions, I still think "beer me" should have stayed in
:D)
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Re: Works in Progress
By: JoeClegg Date: June 27, 2020, 10:41 am
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Haha I'm going to keep it in my scrapbook. It was partly word
count driven, I have to confess ::) Cheers!
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