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[W.I.P][N.Y.T.B.D] S1E1
By: Joshua Date: September 12, 2011, 5:05 pm
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[center]///S1E1 – “Idiots + Future = ?”[/center]
[The screen fades in from black at a face of Nicola looking down
into the camera, then back out again – like somebody fading in
from consciousness. Slowly, it fades in again from black.]
Joshua [Groaning]: “Ugh...”
Nicola [Surprised]: “Oh, Joshua. Are you awake?”
Joshua [Quiet]: “Mhm... yeah...”
Nicola [Relieved]: “Oh, that’s good! It’s just so hard to tell
if somebody is awake when you can’t see their face.”
Joshua [Simple]: “Hm... I can imagine... am I- are we back at
base?”
Nicola [Assurance]: “Uh-huh. You were knocked out when we found
you, so we – well, it was more like Quinn, Jake and I – carried
you back home and laid you to bed. Didn’t seem like you’d hurt
anything, so we assumed you’d just wake up.”
Joshua [Warm]: “Oh... how long was I--?”
Nicola [Shrugging]: “Can’t say it was more than forty-five
minutes, why?”
Joshua [Pleased]: “And you’ve been sitting here, watching me all
this time? Oh Nicola, I never knew you liked me so much.”
Nicola [Slightly flustered]: “Whilst technically true, don’t
think I like watching you sleep or anything. It’s just everybody
else had ‘important’ things to do, you know. Like do nothing.
Like usual. Wasting my time when I could be doing something
useful for the benefit of us all. But no~ *sigh* I got left to
watch you.”
Joshua [Bemused]: “Well, you didn’t have to, y’know...”
Nicola [Nonchalantly]: “Nah, really. It’s fine by me.”
Joshua [Smiling]: “Wow, thanks! You mean you stayed here just
for me?”
Nicola [Laughing]: “Nope, I couldn’t even work in the labs if I
wanted to with that amount of noise anyway. This is the only
quiet region of the base I can study! Ahahaha!”
Joshua [Deflating]: “Ah, yeah... okay... God I feel worthless
around here...”
[Scene shifts to a shot of the rest of the group lazing about.]
Quinn [Defiant]: “Hey! I still think it would go inside rather
than hang around out there.”
Jake [Snide]: “Bow-chicka-bow-wow~”
Daniel [Patient]: “Jake, you’re too young to understand this
kind of thing. This is an art; you can’t just go about your
business and ram it in.”
Jake [Quick]: “Bow-chicka-bow-wow.”
Dan [Ignoring]: “You’ve got to approach the subject with an air
of caution. For example, if you’d care to get behind me Quinn
could slip on in there--”
Jake [Smug]: “Bow-chicka-bow-wow~”
Quinn [Laughing]: “Okay, you got to admit it! That one was kinda
funny!”
Dan [Defeated]: “Ugh... you guys are such children. Why did I
even bother?”
Twilli [Appearing]: “D’awww, and there I was thinking your
stupidity came out naturally.”
Dan [Sighing]: “Again, Twilli, why me?”
Twilli [Pointing]: “Well, lemme ask you one thing, r-tard. Are
you outside? No? What’re you doing inside wasting a lovely day
such as this?”
Quinn [Snickering]: “Don’t pick on Dan, Twilli.”
Dan [Smiling]: “Finally, somebody gives me some respect!”
Jake [Giggling]: “Dan was only showing us his bush.”
Twilli [Amused]: “Ehehe... wow, Dan. Was it was just a ruse to
sneak in a peek at Quinn’s junk?”
Dan [Annoyed]: “Why does it always seem to me like I’m the
victim of every misunderstanding? Flower-arrangement is not just
for girls!”
Quinn [Passive]: “Yeah, but they also said girls can’t ejaculate
and guess who proved that wrong?”
Jake [Stunned]: “Wait... what?”
Twilli [Smirking]: “Hey, if you pathetic excuses for family
would even bother to check outside you’d notice something going
down... Oh, and you too Quinn.”
Daniel [Pouting]: “I’m not going out there with you!”
Twilli [Shrugging]: “Eh, suit yourself. Jake, Quinn, you might
want to see this.”
Quinn [Stretching]: “Yawn~ Fine by me.”
Jake [Peppy]: “Yeah, I needed to get some sun anyway.”
[The scene shifts slowly back to the room with Nicola and Josh
in it, but the shouting from the main group can still be heard.]
Daniel [Sickly]: “My dearest nephew, it is with great
disappointment that I alert you to the fact that sun cannot
reach your skin. You’re wearing a space suit from the future.”
Twilli [Distant]: “Heyyo, you girls coming or is Dan giving you
a hundred excuses on why he blows?”
Quinn [Defendant]: “Okay, you know what Twilli? Dan wouldn’t be
the only one that blows here.”
Twilli [Sly]: “Oh and you’d know all about that, wouldn’t you
Quinn?”
Quinn [Witty]: “Y’know Twills, a girl might be mistaking you for
a misogynist. You might want to think about that for future
reference when said girl is kicking your ass.”
[The view is now inside the room.]
Joshua [Friendly]: “Wow, listen to them argue!”
Nicola [Straight]: “Y’know, sometimes I think I’m the only
mature one here.”
[Josh turns to stare at Nicola.]
Nicola [Quick]: “Oh and you too, Josh.”
Joshua [Deflated]: “I’m worthless...”
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Re: [W.I.P] S1E1 - "Idiots + Future = ?"
By: Twilli Date: September 12, 2011, 9:47 pm
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[The screen fades in from black at a face of Nicola looking down
into the camera, then back out again – like somebody fading in
from consciousness. Slowly, it fades in again from black.]
Joshua [Groaning]: “Ugh...”
Nicola [Surprised]: “Oh, Joshua. Are you awake?”
Joshua [Quiet]: “Mhm... yeah...”
Nicola [Relieved]: “Oh, that’s good! It’s just so hard to tell
if somebody is awake when you can’t see their face.”
Joshua [Simple]: “Hm... I can imagine... am I- are we back at
base?”
Nicola [Assurance]: “Uh-huh. You were knocked out when we found
you, so we – well, it was more like Quinn, Jake and I – carried
you back home and laid you to bed. Didn’t seem like you’d hurt
anything, so we assumed you’d just wake up.”
Joshua [Warm]: “Oh... how long was I--?”
Nicola [Shrugging]: “Can’t say it was more than forty-five
minutes, why?”
Joshua [Pleased]: “And you’ve been sitting here, watching me all
this time? Oh Nicola, I never knew you liked me so much.”
Nicola [Slightly flustered]: “Whilst technically true, don’t
think I like watching you sleep or anything. It’s just everybody
else had ‘important’ things to do, you know. Like do nothing.
Like usual. Wasting my time when I could be doing something
useful for the benefit of us all. But no~ *sigh* I got left to
watch you.”
Joshua [Bemused]: “Well, you didn’t have to, y’know...”
Nicola [Nonchalantly]: “Nah, really. It’s fine by me.”
Joshua [Smiling]: “Wow, thanks! You mean you stayed here just
for me?”
Nicola [Laughing]: “Nope, I couldn’t even work in the labs if I
wanted to with that amount of noise anyway. This is the only
quiet region of the base I can study! Ahahaha!”
Joshua [Deflating]: “Ah, yeah... okay... God I feel like, I'm
worthless, or something....”
Nicola [Stern]: "Stop talking like that Josh! Your not
worthless! You.. uh, just... don't have a specialty!"
Joshua [Sigh]: "Yea, thanks.."
[Scene shifts to a shot of the Dan, Quinn and Jake.]
Jake [Slightly Worried]: "Quinn? Are you sure we should be doing
this? I don't need to be on a Aura's bad side... I don't want to
wake up every night and swear I can see a knife glinting..."
Quinn [Smug]: "Your worrying about Aura killing you? It's Twilli
I'd worry about, since he has a bit less control... Well, he is
a guy I guess."
Dan/Jake [Unison, defendant]: "Hey!"
Quinn [M-O-F]: "It's true. Now are we going to do this, or not?"
Dan [Sigh]: "I agree with Jake, this is probably a bad idea..."
Quinn [Annoyed]: "Oh, c'mon! Don't you want to see what those
two are up to?"
Jake [Immaturely]: "That's whats she said!"
[Screen goes black. A metal clonk is heard.]
Jake [Hurt]: "OW!"
[Screen fades in to Twilli and Aura in a room with a large
machine in it.]
Aura [Doubtful]: "So... Let me get this straight, you've
designed this machine, and it has the possibility of getting rid
of your MPD? And it just happens to be able to get us home?"
Twilli [Thinking]: "Eh... Kinda. It works by copying neural
patterns and destroying them in the subjects head.. Using the
neural patterns, it solves and repairs them, and this allows it
to generate power, by 'thinking.' The amount of power it will
generate is massive, as well!"
Aura [Just-get-to-the-point]: "How exactly does that help us get
out of here, and help us get a bunch of mini dinosaurs off of
our tails?"
Twilli [It's Elementary]: "The amount of power it generates is
enough to power an MDT, which once I'm done calibrating it and
syncing brainwaves, I could use it to teleport us to our houses,
back in our world... It's been a long few months building it,
but I think we might be done in this universe..."
Aura [Doubtful]: "That just seems too easy... There's got to be
a catch, or else you wouldn't need me here."
Twilli [Slight Embarrassment] "Yes, erm, I need someone to watch
it all times, and make sure it isn't disturbed. I, unfortunately
cannot be here twenty-four-seven. That, and, when I first start
the process it will take the both of us being here, as I will
be.. disabled, per say."
Aura [Oh-god-dammit...]: "And what does that mean, exactly?
Disabled? And won't it be suspicious if we're never both
mingling with the others?"
[Quinn, Dan, and Jake can be seen in a window behind the two.]
Twilli [Deadpan]: "By disabled, I mean that I will hooked up to
the machine, and controlling the neural terminating process,
which could take several hours, and I need you to be here to
make sure, if I f**k up, that you can undo my mistake and not
have me turned into a vegetable.."
Aura [Slightly Shocked]: "So... You're trusting me with your
life, in a way?"
Twilli [Amused]: "Yes, in a way. I'm going to go grab something
and make sure we.." [Turns Around, Extremely annoyed] "Aren't
being eavesdropped upon."
[Quinn, Dan, and Jake all disappear in a haste.]
Aura [Not Suprised]: "Sounds good. I'll deter anyone who thinks
there is a question period."
Twilli [Smug]: "At's mah girl." [Walks off, and steps to the
side to avoid thrown pistol, then continues walking.]
[Screen fades to black]
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LET'S GO EARLY PLOT TWIST LET'S GO!
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Re: [W.I.P] S1E1 - "Idiots + Future = ?"
By: Quinn Date: September 13, 2011, 5:23 am
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Hahaha. I'm in definite favor of the second one. Not only does
it have the early plot twist, but the first one is too off-color
for my likings. Y'see, the occasional sex-pun is alright, but
that scene just goes too far.
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Re: [W.I.P] S1E1 - "Idiots + Future = ?"
By: Twilli Date: September 13, 2011, 9:21 am
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Scoreboard:
Josh: 1 Twills: 4
I think we're done here, Josh.
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Re: [W.I.P] S1E1 - "Idiots + Future = ?"
By: Joshua Date: September 13, 2011, 12:31 pm
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That's very true Quinn, I'm actually ashamed to have written
that. I'm just too much in that frame of mind from ARMS, god
help me. It's like sex jokes and swearing all around when you're
writing for psychopaths. >.>
I also prefer Twilli's version a lot better to mine, early plot
twists are cool and this one makes sense. But I do think it
would be better and more dangerous to some degree if he hadn't
had exactly built the machine, because let's face it; Twilli
can't build, especially something scientific like this. It
wouldn't make sense for us never to have seen Twilli gone for a
month, or him to acquire the resources to build this machine or
even have the knowledge to compare brainwaves. I think it'd be a
lot better if we settled on the fact that perhaps Twilli had
more or less hotwired something of Nicolas, and it would either
be her or Aura (or possibly me) he'd trust. And seeing as I was
knocked cold prior and Nicola would undoubtedly get upset at the
sight of her inventions falling into the wrong hands - and by
hands I mean paws - Aura has to fit the bill. Which is useful,
as Aura's character could undoubtedly use more development.
Oh, and by the emo-ish worthless thing? It was more like a
really comedic "I'm worthless!" type scenario, with arrows
pointing at me and my picture in black-and-white and all kinds
of conventions, and at the end of my unfinished works I posted
"Worthless!" were I slip back into a phase. But thinking about
it, just take it out. I don't get depressed easily, so how
about~
Joshua [Deflating]: "I understand what you mean... Being a
scientist must be pretty taxing on you..."
Nicola [Modest]: "Ah, well, I do get up to more in a day than
you guys probably get up to in a week!"
Joshua [Sighing]: "You guys? Wow... thanks?"
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Re: [W.I.P] S1E1 - "Idiots + Future = ?"
By: Quinn Date: September 13, 2011, 7:06 pm
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Nicola [Stern]: "Stop talking like that Josh! You're not
worthless! You.. uh, just... don't have a specialty!"
Joshua [Sigh]: "Yea, thanks.."
[...Cue the other three running in and slamming the door behind
them.]
Quinn [Out of breath]: "Just, err, checking on our worthless
member?"
Jake [Quickly]: "Uh, yeah! The worthless one!"
Dan [Exasperated]: "Is that worthless heap of a
second-in-command up ye-- oh, he is!"
Josh [Gaping]: "...I... but... that... I really am, aren't
I?..."
On a side note, you were asking about alternative episode names
earlier? I couldn't think of anything punny - just ask Nicola -
and we don't want any horrible cliches, so our options are
limited. I was thinking of something along the lines of "Wake-Up
Call", but that's a little bland. Ideas, anyone?
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[W.I.P][N.Y.T.B.D] S1E1
By: Twilli Date: September 13, 2011, 11:16 pm
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'Time Travelling with the Moron Squad'
F**k, that'd be an awesome album name. But for now, episode name
(suggestion). I'll suggest it to my friends as an album name
later.
And Quinn, that is an awesome idea.
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Re: [W.I.P][N.Y.T.B.D] S1E1
By: Joshua Date: September 14, 2011, 3:09 pm
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[s]Okay folks, we've decided to change the series name from
'Addled' to 'Time Travelling with the Moron Squad'[/s]
I actually like the episode title 'Wake-up Call'. Makes sense,
in light of the opening being somebody waking up. What about
'Special Fun Episode 92B; Joshii-kun's unexpected mishap!' Nah,
I'm joking.
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Re: [W.I.P][N.Y.T.B.D] S1E1
By: Twilli Date: September 14, 2011, 5:34 pm
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No, that could be the episode name.. But wake-up call is too...
Predictable. It makes too much sense.
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Re: [W.I.P][N.Y.T.B.D] S1E1
By: Quinn Date: September 15, 2011, 5:46 am
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Because, of course, we can't have anything resembling logic on
here, no sir, and "Time Travelling with the Moron Squad" is a
far superior name, considering it's so friggin' long and we
don't have time travel at allllllllllllllllllllll. [/sarcasm]
But I have to agree with both sides, here. While the name I
suggested has partial merit, I just don't know if it sounds
right. We may have to make an actual poll for this.
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